Talk:BMC Software/Archive 2

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I am a BMC Software employee.

Karenarlenereynolds and Tamicasey no longer work at BMC. I will be continuing the previous effort to clean-up this page by trimming and deleting unnecessary sections. To continue from the previous comments, I believe these sections should be removed completely:

• Location
• Directors and staff
• Partnerships
• Assets

In each of these instances, as well as most of the History section, I believe there is undue weight added, see: WP:WEIGHT

Additionally, old data in the Infobox from 2012 should be removed.

One concern with the current page is the extreme depth from a decade ago makes the page less accurate now. By shortening the page to just a couple of sections we can reduce the chance of undue weight on a particular timeframe or on what in hindsight is inconsequential...we don't need a complete history of every single thing that ever occurred at BMC.

For reference, analysts typically consider ServiceNow BMC's #1 competitor.

Per WP:COIRESPONSE, "Look for unnecessary detail that may have been added to overwhelm something negative." -- it seems to me that most of the current very long article could fit this description.

Wattssw (talk) 18:31, 13 September 2018 (UTC)

Reply 14-SEP-2018

  Edit request partially implemented  

1. Y Content which was insufficiently paraphrased from the source material has been removed per WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.
2. Y Content which was found to be editorial content and not identified as such has been omitted per WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV.
3. Y Content which was quoted but not given proper attribution for the quoted material (by stating the author's name) was omitted per WP:QUOTE. Much content has been quoted for this article, but in instances where this was done and proper attribution was given, these quotes have been retained (i.e., where an SEC report was quoted and the claim statement includes the sentence "According to an SEC filing, ...").
4. Y URL links to references which were no longer working were searched for replacements. For references in which replacements could not be found, these were omitted. Several of these instances did not involve the removal of accompanying text, because the claims covered by the dead URLs ended up being covered by other, still-working URLs.
5. N Content in the infobox which was outdated was not removed because those items were not individually identified by the COI editor.

Regards,  spintendo  09:07, 14 September 2018 (UTC)

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Part of an edit requested by an editor with a conflict of interest has been implemented.

In response to the previous reply from Spintendo Specific edit requests:

1. From Infobox, please remove these items which are 6 years out of date, and as BMC is no longer a public company these data points are no longer published: Revenue Increase US$2.172 billion[1] (2012); Operating income Increase US$543.9 million[1] (2012); Net income Decrease US$401.0 million[1] (2012); Total assets Increase US$4.864 billion[1] (2012); Total equity Increase US$1.446 billion[1] (2012); Number of employees 6,900[1] (March 2012)
2. From Location section: Please remove entire section. This section contains trivial information about the company.
3. From Directors and staff section: Please remove entire section. This section contains trivial and outdated information about the company.
4. From Partnerships section: Please remove entire section. This section contains trivial and outdated information about the company.
5. From Assets section: Please remove entire section. This section contains trivial information about the company.

In each of these cases I look to WP:WEIGHT and WP:COIRESPONSE as guidelines suggesting there is too much trivial non-essential content that should be removed for improved balance and to ensure future accuracy. Wattssw (talk) 15:23, 14 September 2018 (UTC)

I've removed the financials from the infobox. Removing the other sections you asked for would not create balance, which by definition, is a balance of all different types of information. In order to balance these sections, they should be re-written. As I said earlier, I've already removed everything that was outright removable. Anything else that is remaining and is properly sourced will require more creative thinking and creative writing to bring a balance between it and the rest of the article's content. spintendo  18:02, 14 September 2018 (UTC)

Thank you Spintendo for working with me on this. Regarding Assets section, the statement "BMC owns real estate property but it's mostly in four office buildings totaling 1,515,000 square feet (140,700 m2) in Houston, Texas; sales and development offices around the world are leased.[28]" is backed up by only a single source from 2002. This is 16 years ago, and the company has since moved its HQ. This information is not accurate. Would you consider deleting this specific section? Wattssw (talk) 18:49, 14 September 2018 (UTC)

Hi Spintendo would you consider removing the Assets section due to reasons listed above? I don't mean to badger you, just trying to understand why these sections full of very old, very outdated content must remain on this page. FYI GermanJoe and Ronz as previous editors working on this page, any thoughts on removing the Assets section - and frankly some of the others as well ? Regarding BMC's extensive history section, I look to the Talk page for ServiceNow for guidance, we should be following similar WP:PROMO practice and remove this lengthy history: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:ServiceNow#WP_page_as_a_proxy_for_company_website Wattssw (talk) 14:00, 18 September 2018 (UTC)

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This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered.

In Assets section, the statement "BMC owns real estate property but it's mostly in four office buildings totaling 1,515,000 square feet (140,700 m2) in Houston, Texas; sales and development offices around the world are leased.[28]" is backed up by only a single source from 2002. This is 16 years ago, and the company has since moved its HQ. This information is not accurate and as real estate is not a primary function of BMC, this section should be removed as per guidance from WP:WEIGHT and WP:COIRESPONSE Wattssw (talk) 16:36, 26 September 2018 (UTC)

Reply 26-SEP-2018

  Edit request partially implemented  

1. Y The paragraph's heading and contents have been altered to reflect the time period that the 10K refers to.
2. FYI: Editor signature's are not to be copied and pasted into posts made by yourself or other editors. When referring to other editors by name, simply type the unformatted name. Thank you !  Spintendo  18:56, 26 September 2018 (UTC)

This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest was declined. Your request does not specify which source applies to which portion of the text. If a COI edit request contains a verbatim copy of the requested text, this ought to include properly formatted references placed at the precise location where a claim is made (See WP:INTEGRITY). "Please add the following sources" is not acceptable and will be rejected; the request must be of the form "Please change x to y using z as the reference".

Due to https://www.prnewswire.com/news-releases/kkr-completes-acquisition-of-bmc-software-300723077.html, a few updates should be made for the page to be accurate.

Suggested edits:

1. Update to this more concise first paragraph: BMC Software, Inc. (“BMC”) is a technology company headquartered in Houston, Texas with offices worldwide. BMC offers comprehensive IT software and services, including mainframe management, IT service management, IT operations management, application development, and cloud computing management.
2. Edit second paragraph to be accurate to new KKR acquisition: In 2013, BMC transitioned from a public company to a private company. Investors included Bain Capital, Golden Gate Capital, Insight Venture Partners, GIC Private Limited's GIC Special Investments Pte Ltd, and Elliott Management Corporation. In 2018, KKR, a leading global investment firm, acquired BMC.
3. In "Acquisition and privatization by private equity firms" section, please add this sentence as a new paragraph: Global investment firm KKR acquired BMC Software in 2018.

Wattssw (talk) 16:53, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Reply 19-OCT-2018

  Unable to review edit request   Your edit request could not be reviewed because it is unclear which references are connected to which claim statements in the text of your proposal. When proposing edit requests, it is important to highlight in the text which specific sources are doing the referencing for each claim.^[a] The point of an inline citation is to allow the reviewer and readers to check that the material is sourced; that point is lost if the citation's note number is not clearly placed. Note the example below:

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The sun is pretty big, but the moon is not so big. The sun is also quite hot.

References
      1. Sjöblad, Tristan. The Sun. Academic Press, 2018, p. 1.
      2. Duvalier, Gabrielle. "Size of the Moon", Scientific American, 51(78):46.
      3. Uemura, Shū. The Sun's Heat. Academic Press, 2018, p. 2.

In the example above there are three references provided, but the claim statements do not indicate which reference applies where. Your edit request similarly does not specify where the references you have provided are to be placed. These links between material and their source references must be more clearly made, as shown in the next example below:

Y CORRECT

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The sun is pretty big,^[1] but the moon is not so big.^[2] The sun is also quite hot.^[3]

References

1. ^ Sjöblad, Tristan. The Sun. Academic Press, 2018, p. 1.
2. ^ Duvalier, Gabrielle. "Size of the Moon", Scientific American, 51(78):46.
3. ^ Uemura, Shū. The Sun's Heat. Academic Press, 2018, p. 2.

In the example above, the links between the provided references and their claim statements are perfectly clear. Kindly reformulate your edit request so that it aligns more with the second example above, and feel free to re-submit that edit request at your earliest convenience. Regards,  Spintendo  17:21, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Notes

1. As this request involves text intended to be placed in the lead section, ref notes would not be neccessary, as this information should be placed elsewhere in the article along with the appropriate reference. Instead, please indicate where in the main body of text the new reference is to be placed.