Talk:Dick Mize/GA1

Lead

• Link first instance of cross-country skiing (sport).
  • Done.
• Extend opening sentence by adding his birthplace. That will put Eagle County into context for the second sentence.
  • Done.
• During his college years, he earned multiple medals being part of the Western Colorado Mountaineers when they had won two titles on 1956 and 1957 in cross-country skiing. This needs to be revised. The "had" is superfluous, and "on 1956 and 1957" lacks sense and breaks the flow. Suggest rewording it as "During his college years, he earned multiple medals as part of the Western Colorado Mountaineers when they won two cross-country skiing titles in 1956 and 1957".
  • Done.
• Link "army" to United States Army, with branch if known.
  • Done.
• Can "competing for the United States" be linked to a US biathlon team? Or, was it a US Army team, which isn't really clear?
  • Reworded.
• Link running.
  • Linked to "cross-country running" instead.
• Can "Masters World Championship" be linked to anything?
  • Nope.

Early life, education, and NCAA

• No need for "Richard Norman "Dick" Mize" here. Just Mize is enough.
  • Not done, his full name needs to be cited here.
• Include Eagle County in the birthplace, for context as above.
  • Done.
• I'm confused by Copperhill, Tennessee. I see that Red Cliff is near Tennessee Pass in Colorado, so is there another Copperhill in Colorado?
  • Oops, my bad! Fixed.
• Link high school, basketball, and saxophone.
  • Done
• Link all of marching band, football, soccer, and the first narrative mention of cross-country skiing.
  • Done

Career

• Change After graduating, he had enlisted to "After graduating, Mize had enlisted". A new section needs his name at an early stage.
  • Done.
• He then participated at the 1959 North American Championships which was also a test event for the then-upcoming Winter Olympics in Squaw Valley and placed second with a time of 1:54:21.9. This needs to be revised. Try something like "He then participated at the 1959 North American Championships, which was also a test event for the upcoming Winter Olympics in Squaw Valley. He placed second with a time of 1:54:21.9".
  • Done.
• By the way, I presume "he placed second" is okay in American English, because we would say "he was placed second" in GB? Ignore me if it is good AE.
  • Yep.
• He competed in his second world championships at the Biathlon World Championships 1959 in Courmayeur, Italy. is awkward with the repetition. Try "He competed in his second world championships at Courmayeur, Italy in 1959".
  • Done.
• Link Tennessee Pass.
  • Wikilinked the previous mention instead due to an error from my end.

Later years

• Link all of physical education, biology, skiing, and cross-country running.
  • All are wikilinked.
• Why "even" an administrator?
  • Fixed.

References sample

You have twelve references, all online, so I'll take four as a sample.

• Ref 2: Good.
• Ref 4: Good.
• Ref 9: Good. The source actually says he was Sp-4 rank, so I'd specify that in the article.
• Ref S: Good.

That's about it for now. I'll leave it with you, and then I'll complete the review when you've had chance to consider all the comments. No rush. Jack (talk) 16:53, 2 December 2025 (UTC)

Actually, as you may need some time to pick this up again, I'll place it on hold for the time being. Still no rush, though. Jack (talk) 14:52, 6 December 2025 (UTC)

@BlackJack Hi! I'll get to your comments in a few days, been a bit busy right now but I assure you I'll act as fast as I can! Arconning (talk) 16:18, 7 December 2025 (UTC)

That's okay, Arconning. Take your time. I do very long deadlines. All the best, Jack (talk) 16:32, 7 December 2025 (UTC)

@BlackJack Done! :) Arconning (talk) 12:12, 9 December 2025 (UTC)