Talk:Fate/Hollow Ataraxia/GA1

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Nominator: Veyhola (talk · contribs) 18:30, 3 April 2026 (UTC)

Reviewer: A412 (talk · contribs) 05:46, 5 June 2026 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this. ~ A412 ^talk! 05:46, 5 June 2026 (UTC)

@Veyhola I finished the review, but this needs a lot of work to reach GA. I've seen you work quickly before, so I won't fail it, but fair warning. ~ A412 ^talk! 05:55, 7 June 2026 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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References

Spotcheck

[5] - including a Hanafuda card game, "Operation Illya's Castle" - The source text does not verify this, and it does not appear to be in the video either.
[8] - Fate/Hollow Ataraxia was released as an adult game on October 28, 2005, as a limited-edition version, playable on Windows PCs as a DVD - is cited to [8] and [18]. [8] does not appear to verify any of the information here, and [18] only verifies that it was a 2005 PC game. Neither source verifies that it was an adult game, a limited edition, or a DVD.
[10] - Fine.
[13]
- merge the routes of Fate/stay night into a "cohesive" story - cannot find this information in the source.
- including Aramoto Kei, Hikaru Sakurai, and Morisaki Ryouto - cannot find this information in the source.
[19] - and as a bonus came bundled with the visual novel's original soundtrack - I don't see how this database entry that shows the soundtrack exists verifies this information
[24] - Fine.
[31] - Fate/hollow ataraxia Anthology Comic was released between January 30, 2006, and May 25, 2007, in nine tankōbon volumes under their Magi-Cu Comics imprint - Source does not verify this information, it's a link to a single comic's product page.

Images

Infobox: fine, fair use
Gameplay: fine, fair use. See my comment below in prose review though.
City: fine, CC-BY-SA
Second cover art: Problematic per MOS:VGCOVERART. We should not include cover art of less notable releases, and should not include it in the body.
Manga: fine, fair use

Prose

Lead

Type-Moon released a version of the game without erotic content, with a PlayStation Vita port in November 2014 - was this version only for PSVita, or also for Windows? If the latter, were they both released in 2014?
adult game Fate/stay night for mature audiences - what does for mature audiences modify here?
The game was introduced primarily as a fan-disc intended to deliver a more "happier" follow-up to Fate/stay night that allowed the characters to coexist peacefully after the "tragic" events of the original visual novel - Quoting single words looks like MOS:SCAREQUOTE. Suggestion: The game was introduced primarily as a fan-disc intended to deliver a happier follow-up to Fate/stay night that allowed the characters to coexist peacefully after the events of the original
which offers different scenarios with courses of interaction - unclear what this means
The game ranked as one of the top selling visual novels for the time of its release - vague, suggestion: The game was the second-best-selling visual novel of 2005

Gameplay

General note: the article doesn't explain what the gameplay is: it says it abandons the traditional linear gameplay and route-based system but doesn't say what it is instead. What are players doing moment-to-moment? Is it, like the first game, a game that requires minimal interaction from players where players come to a decision point where they are given a chance to choose from options displayed on the screen? Is it an adventure game as the series article says? If it is, what does that involve?
Image: is the minigame displayed part of the core gameplay? If not, should we choose a screenshot of the core gameplay instead?
marked by "!" - without a visual this is meaningless
flags are retained across loops - what are flags?

Plot

She and Avenger set off to compete and win the Holy Grail War - slightly ungrammatical, compete doesn't take a direct object. compete in?
He realizes that Bazett and him - him is ungrammatical. he and Bazett?

Development

The first half of the first paragraph here is a really confusing read. Is it a spin-off? A sequel? A pseudo-sequel? A fan disc? I'd lead with a clear Fate/hollow ataraxia is a <descriptor> to Fate/stay night.
Are Meteo Hoshizora, Aramoto Kei, Hikaru Sakurai, and Morisaki Ryouto the same as the sub-writers who aided with daily writing and editing?
The manufacturing of the original adult version had since then been suspended - Move up one sentence to keep in chronological order

Manga

This is confusing. Did the various publishers really name different anthologies identical titles? I don't know how to make this more readable. Maybe a table?

Reception

This is a very thin reception section, it's just sales data. Critical reception is a borderline required section for video games. Is there really none? This game had two re-releases, surely between the three releases there was critical reception.

@Veyhola: In case you didn't see the comments above. Z1720 (talk) 01:59, 15 June 2026 (UTC)
Fixing Veyhola (talk) 21:44, 18 June 2026 (UTC)