Talk:Herdling/GA1

Image captions

• The infobox caption should be removed per MOS:VGCOVERART, as it is sufficiently clear what is shown without the caption.  Done
• Via, holding a staff, takes the herd of calicorns in a journey to the snow-laden mountains up ahead. -> Via, holding a staff, takes the calicorns to the snow-laden mountains. Calling it a "staff" also mismatches with the body.  Done

Lead

• Lede sentence should clarify it is a "video game", not just a "game".  Done
• The path features forests, plateaus and valleys... No oxford comma was used here despite the earliër sentence having one. These should be consistent throughout the article.  Done
• environment hazards -> environmental hazards  Done
• You can link stealth.  Done
• provide -> provides  Done
• 3D game currently leads to a disambiguätion page, and I would prefer it be spelt out as three-dimensional game.  Done
• Publisher Panic had...  Done
• It received generally positive reviews, with praise for its visuals, music and emotional connection with the calicorns, though some faulted the lack of storyline, short playtime, and the Switch version's controls. More oxford comma inconsistency.  Done
• Must the player heal found calicorns? The section currently says "can". Reply - Per the reviews, it's not a defined objective to continue in the game so the player can wander off the city without rescuing all the calicorns in there.

Gameplay

Gameplay is supposed to go before Plot, so I will read this section first and decide whether it's best to conform.

• First sentence should say "video game".  Done
• Third person perspective leads to a disambiguätion page. A better link would be to third-person (video games).  Done
• I would link stealth.  Done
• Nitpick, but perhaps the predator names can be put in quote marks.  Done
• You can link progress is saved.  Done
• ...which are typically found near shrines and also serve as spots to bond with the herd. Does this relate to the gameplay?  Done; yes :) I added "in the game" phrase to make it further clear just in case.
  • Sorry I should've been clearer with what I wanted; you can remove "in the game". What I meant was that the effect of "bonding with the herd" isn't touched upon. Is it possible to explain how this directly affects gameplay? It's ok if you cannot. -t  Done; I clarified on the "bonding with the herd" in the gameplay section with the methods that player can use to bond with the herd during gameplay.

Plot

• Gameplay reads fine without Plot, so I would reccomend moving this section after Gameplay.  Done

Development and release

• Mentions of other videö games should be followed by their release year: "Far: Lone Sails" -> "Far: Lone Sails (2018)"  Done
• Would prefer spelling out "intellectual property".  Done
• 3D game leads to a disambiguätion page.  Done; changed it to three-dimensional game.
• Link Panic.  Done
• ...stated his team's inspiration as being "inspired by... -> ...stated his team was "inspired by...  Done
• You can link indie.  Done
• A trailer was released on Steam... -> A trailer was released on the digital distribution service Steam...  Done

Reception

• You can try to tone down the "[person] of [publication] said..." or "[publication]'s [person] did..." wording. Reply - Can you check if this User:Sddarealone/sandbox/Herdling and Terramax § Critical reception sandbox section where I created the draft for the reception (and now heavily edited with a few reviews just removed) has a better tone and style that addresses the WP:MOS concerns? If not, I'll try to change the critical reception in the current revision.
  • I like the variëty of the wording more on the draft (like having a context clause before Polygon). I should clarify that this is more of an FAC standard, so you should not stress on this too much.
• Some criticisms state opinions as fact.
• Otherwise, this section looks fine.

Sourcing

The citations chosen were based on this revision.

• 1 I missed where the reviewer calls it a stick.  Done; Added the video games are good source which supports the given sentence.
• 2 This website looks charming! Reply - Indeed :)
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• 4 I missed where this or 5 describe how the calicorns can help break open gates.  Done; Replaced given sources with the shacknews source for the claim.
• 5 See above.  Done
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• 8 Says that Oko and Panic partnered in December, not August.  Done
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• 22 Forgot FT needs a subscription for some articles, so I will assume good competence. Reply - Yes, it was a AGF edit. In lieu of character development for the red-coated protagonist come the personalities you impose on the calicorns — by naming them, bestowing trinkets on them and saving them from harm. Otherwise, the interface is minimal, the controls barely demanding more than two buttons.
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  • The quote should have Herdling's in brackets.  Done; I'm a bit unsure about this.
  • I do not see where the soundtrack was nominated for multiple awards.  Done; I reused the sources from Herdling (video game) § Accolades section for all the award nominations.