Talk:Here We Go... Again/GA1

Spotchecks

Refer to this version for the ref numbers.

• 1, close paraphrasing:
  • "Rex hands me a Bullet mic ... and we just start singing. Few days later, Rex says, 'Hey, we played that thing for Abel' — you know, the Weeknd — 'and he really likes it' ... Somehow it floated into his creative ether and he jumped in as a writer." vs
  • "...went to producer Rex Kudo's house, who handed Johnston a microphone, and Johnston then sang with Kudo. A few days later, Kudo played Johnston's vocals for the Weeknd, who liked it, and eventually Johnston came in as a writer for the song."
• 3, no issues found
• 6, no issues found, although you can probably tone down with the quotations
• 7, close paraphrasing issues; the source says "everlasting love" instead of just "love".
  • "The second verse goes to Tyler, who expresses skepticism about the concept of everlasting love" vs.
  • "describing his skepticism of love"
• 8 close paraphrasing issues.
  • "Tyler echoes those thoughts on through his own verse" vs.
  • "simply echoing the Weeknd's thoughts"
• 9, no issues found
• 10, no issues found
• 11, no issues found
• 19, no issues found
• 22, no issues found
• 25 - the year-end chart is cited, when it should be citing the page for the Weeknd's chart history.

Prose comments

Most comments will revolve around grammar and concision.

• "revealed to the Los Angeles Times" -> "told the Los Angeles Times" with Los Angeles Times in italics

 Done

No; the wording is still the same.

• "him and Christian Love" -> "he and Christian Love"

 Done

• "producer Rex Kudo's house" be consistent with the non-use of false titles here

 Done

• "producer Rex Kudo's house, who handed..." -> "producer Rex Kudo's house. Kudo handed" (a house cannot hand someone a microphone)
• "eventually" is not needed

 Done

• "came in as a writer for the song" phrasal verb makes the sentence clunky. perhaps replace with "...for the Weeknd, who liked it; Johnson got writing credits for the song"

 Done

• "sung by Johnston and Christian Love" remove Love's first name

 Done

• "with Tyler, the Creator being revealed" no need for "being"

 Done

• After saying "January 3, 2022", the article should stop listing the years for subsequent dates to avoid redundancy

 Done

• "The title of the song was then revealed alongside the tracklist for Dawn FM" -> "The tracklist, which listed the song, was revealed on January 5, and the album was released on January 7."

 Done

• "The song has been described as a soft rock ballad" if no other source lists a different genre it's safe to replace "has been described as" with "is"

 Done

• "Ken Partridge of Genius described the first verse of the song as the Weeknd singing about his success ... but also has him sing about an ex-lover" -> "On the first verse, the Weeknd sings about his success ... and about an ex-lover"

 Done

• "while the Weeknd claims that he 'loved her right,' and further claims that he made her 'scream like Neve Campbell'." -> split into its own sentence, then rewrite to "He says that not only did he love her, he also made her 'scream like Neve Campbell'.

 Done

• Do not link "scream" to Scream (1996 film) per MOS:EASTEREGG; rather, if you want to keep the link, try finding a source that discusses the reference.

 Done

• "willing to marriage" should be "willing to marry"

 Done

• "being the seventh highest charting track from the album" "being" and "from the album" can be culled

 Done

@AskeeaeWiki, please ping me once you are done with everything. ‍  PSA 🏕️  (talk) 04:12, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

@AskeeaeWiki, more comments:

I have done some copyediting to correct awkward wording and trim sentences, to save you the time and trouble of having to do it yourself. Please revert some changes if you disagree.

• "what was originally a fling interests him" try not to use "fling" here as that is an unencyclopedic word.
• The "under construction" template is still on top of the page. Are you sure you have exhausted all the sources? There is noticeably still no critical reception. Considering much of the articles that focus on this song specifically are thinkpieces about Angelina Jolie, which clash with our guidelines about spreading rumors, I also am unsure if this should remain an article. Now that will be another discussion to deal with, but to focus on this review: the "broad" criterion remains to be met, since not all main points are covered in the article. Please address this ASAP. ‍  PSA 🏕️  (talk) 06:12, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll check for more sources, there are some other articles in the Dawn FM topic which probably shouldn't have articles (Best Friends (The Weeknd song)). 𝘮𝘪𝘤𝘩𝘢𝘦𝘭'𝘴 𝘥𝘦𝘢𝘳 𝘮𝘦𝘭𝘢𝘯𝘤𝘩𝘰𝘭𝘺, 06:16, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

I see that expansion of this article is done, and since I think everything has been exhausted, this is good enough for a GAN. Apologies for not getting to this sooner. Will pass ‍  PSA 🏕️  (talk) 11:59, 9 May 2024 (UTC)