Talk:Jaydes/GA1

Notes

• Replace each word of "Dumont" with "Jaydes" except the first lead sentence.
• Revise this sentence: "...switched to online learning in favor of making music, and also due to controversies at school"
  • --> "...switched to online learning to focus on his music career and due to controversies from school."
• Revise this sentence: "His singles "Highschool," "Vivienne," "Trust Issues," "South," and "Clueless," would later gain traction online. The releases under the name "evvls" is best known for his soft vocals, and the support of the popularization of the PluggnB genre in 2021."
  • --> "His singles "Highschool," "Vivienne," "Trust Issues," "South," and "Clueless," would later gain traction online,[5][6] best known for Jaydes' soft vocals and helping popularize the PluggnB genre in 2021.[1]"
• Revise this sentence: "Jaydes would release his debut extended play (EP) !? (2021) which rise to prominence following the track "Scam Likely" going viral.[7]"
  • --> "Jaydes would release his debut EP !? (2021), which rose to prominence when its track "Scam Likely" went viral.[7]"
• Revise this sentence: "Although, due to the EP's short runtime, listeners criticized the project over this, similar to his previous EP, !?."
  • --> "..., though it was criticized for its short runtime, similar to his previous EP, !?."
• Revise this sentence: "...which gained significant traction, and was considered a turning point in his career.[9]"
  • ---> "which received significant attention and was considered a turning point in his career.[9]"
• Revise this sentence: "When working on the EP, he had explained that "I was just tryna' make music based on how I feel". The 9-track EP features fellow artists within the underground, Riovaz and Rich Amiri."
  • ---> "While working on the EP, he explained that he was making music based on how he felt. The 9-track EP features music artists Riovaz and Rich Amiri."
• Remove the comma after "Rose"
• Revise this sentence: "A critic from Pitchfork recalled "the project pulls together disparate strands, from plugg to shoegaze and emo balladry", "It's messy, but it works more often than not."[12]"
  • ---> "A critic from Pitchfork stated that the album blends plugg with shoegaze and emo balladry, claiming it to be messy but works that way.[12]"
• Italicize Ghetto Cupid in The Summit Pinnacle's quote and remove its own quotation marks.
• Replace "the" with "his" on this sentence: "On August of the same year, the..."
• Italicize Girlypunk and removed its own quotation marks. Also capitalize it as it works on Wikipedia policy.
• Add the comma aft
• Revise this sentence: "...and later uploading to streaming platforms on May 8"
  • --> "...and was later uploaded to streaming platforms on May 8"
• Replace "this" with "the" on this sentence: "...which he claimed in an interview that he recorded this material live in-studio."
• Fabulous Tour needs a year
• Music video section needs a sub-heading that says "Music videos"
• Move the "Lyrical concerns" section to legal issues, with the section headline removed
  • "Junkie" also needs quotation marks, as songs usually have. Capitalize it also.

Sourcing

• Nothing about the EP Romanticism (2022) is sourced.
• The final sentence on the 2022 section (based on Heartpacing) is unsourced.
• Nothing about the EP Girlypunk (2023) is sourced.
• Nothing about the EP Bipolar (2024) is sourced.
• Much of Jaydes' discography section is unsourced. If there's a song or even a project that has no reliable sources, then remove it entirely.

GA Criteria Table

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Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Fine, but it is not ready.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Multiple issues
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Some sentences have no sourcing claim
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	No issues here.
	2c. it contains no original research.	There is some original research unless sources are provided
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Highest copyvio is 18%, which is good.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	The artist's personal life, career, musical style, legal issues, and discography contain supplemental information, though sources need to be complete.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Usually consistent, with no distracting issues spotted
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	"Lyrical concerns" is a bit less neutral. I suggest you move it to the "Legal issues" section
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Author holds 45.7% of the article's authorship. Normally stable as of now.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Three free use files all have proper sources and rationales
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	All have good descriptions
	7. Overall assessment.

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