Talk:Machines (Horizon)/GA1
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Nominator: ZooBlazer (talk · contribs) 21:23, 15 March 2026 (UTC)
Reviewer: A.Cython (talk · contribs) 15:51, 7 June 2026 (UTC)
I will review this as part of GARC#93.A.Cython(talk) 15:51, 7 June 2026 (UTC)
I enjoyed reading about the development of one the main antagonists in the Horizon games, the machines. Overall the article is well written and sourced. I have some minor comments, see below. A.Cython(talk) 02:22, 11 June 2026 (UTC)
- @A.Cython: I think I have addressed all of your comments. Thanks for the review! I left some comments below to clarify some things, but let me know if any of your comments weren't addressed enough or if you have any other concerns. -- ZooBlazer 03:15, 11 June 2026 (UTC)
Various
- No edit war
- Neutral
- Broad and focused
- No copyright issues
- Figures have appropriate licences (three are copyrighted but can be used under fair use justification; they were resized to satisfy fair use) and figure captions
Prose & MoS
- The lead is a bit large with about 450+ words. Per MOS:LEADLENGTH the size of the lead should not be much more than 400 words. A little trimming would help.
- The initial concept for the machines in Horizon Zero Dawn (2017) drew heavily from the militaristic and industrial aesthetic of Guerrilla Games' previous franchise, Killzone. However, the development team abandoned this direction after realising during testing that fighting these models made players feel more like traditional soldiers than tribal hunters I found this confusing since I had no idea about the Killzone game, so the "militaristic and industrial aesthetic" is poorly defined. Consider rewriting.
- Unfortunately, I have not played the game myself, and I suspect many readers who are interested in the article may not be familiar with all of the game's terminology and jargon. I think you need to explain all the different classifications. For example, I have little understanding of what Horus units or Chariot line really are. So having a brief summary of all classifications might help. Similar to individual machines, e.g., Thunderjaw, Stormbird, and Fireclaw. A brief description would help.
- I think it would be more natural to have the "Background" section right after the lead.
- I was working on the article around the time Leon S. Kennedy was at FAC and it has Concept first, so that is why it is that way. -- ZooBlazer
- Scholars such as remove as it is not needed
Sources
Spot check: 6, 10, 16, 23, 53, 57, 61, 74, 78
- Citation 53 does not support: Wesley LeBlanc from Game Informer observed that the machines were highly aggressive, warning that the combat was very challenging and the player could be defeated quickly.
- Why the "Background" section does not have any citations? Does this falls under the WP:PLOTCITE?
- Yeah it is essentially the plot info. Background was used on a fellow machines article, Machines (Nier: Automata) so that is what I went with. -- ZooBlazer
Final comments
Thank you for making the changes, I believe it read better now. So, congratulations to ZooBlazer for bringing the machines into the GA family! Well done! A.Cython(talk) 20:00, 11 June 2026 (UTC)