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Copypaste
Can anyone confirm that https://books.google.com/books?id=JzXtBgAAQBAA is copying off of this article instead of the other way around? The Google preview is too limited and doesn't show whether or not this article appears in that book's references. Lowercase sigmabot III (talk) 00:09, 19 March 2015 (UTC)
- The entire book seems to be a collection of Wikipedia material.--MWAK (talk) 08:37, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
- Alright; that works. 204.234.74.238 (talk) 15:12, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
Article update
Hey everyone. I stumbled across this article a few days ago and was shocked about how poorly it structured, giving its historical importance! Having a huge interest in Barbarossa, I spend the last two days significantly improving this article in my sandbox with the purpose of getting it to GA-status. The main problem I faced was the sheer length of this article, which went way beyond 10,000 words. It would be fair to say that 70-80% of all my recent work on this article has been copyediting, collection sources, converting everything to Harvard references and reformulating long sentences. But I have also, of course, as every copy editor does in large projects, omitted large parts of this article. Namely, I have removed the section "Events" as it contained a bunch of mixed information which importance I failed to see sometimes. It also contained information which was already in the article somewhere else, reformulated. I have removed the section "Reasons for initial Soviet defeats" because the reasons behind the Soviet defeats are explained early in the article. It seemed to me to be, for the most part, a section of extended material which was already stated. For pretty much of the same reasons, I have removed the section "Outcome", although placed some parts of the information from there into other ones. Lastly, I have removed the section "Causes of the failure of Operation Barbarossa" because, like the one with the Soviets, the reasons behind the German defeats are explained early in the article, but I have also copied parts of that section and used it elsewhere. It's also worth noticing that some of these sections simply had to be removed per WP:MOS which calls for articles to be under 10,000 words. With that being said, I have managed to source everything in this article and made some other not-to-important changes here and there to make the article look better. I'm totally aware that nobody owns pages on Wikipedia and that the project is a collaboration of millions of editors. Therefore, I would be more than happy to discuss re-adding any material which was removed in my improvement, but I also suggest you click here to see how the article looked before my changes if you haven't already. Regards, Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 02:35, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
- Well, the result is not too bad and you have respected much of the previous text. However, there are (still) some issues with your change:
- WP:Length (not MOS) does not impose a strict 10,000 words limit. It just suggests that this is normally "beneficial". Certainly, you should not block any substantial future edits by other users arguing that otherwise the mandatory maximum length would be exceeded. There isn't any :o).
- The general narrative is too "Germanocentric". The Red Army had a strategy too, involving a tactic of active defence. Much of the lack of fortification and the abundance of dispersion can be explained by this. The strategy horribly failed. In this context the enormous tank battles in the Western Ukraine should mentioned. You refer to Kirchubel a lot and his work is indeed excellent, the best popular-science books available on the subject. But you don't seem to have grasped the essence of it.
- The maps! Where are the maps? There is room for maps. Most people can read maps. Put the maps back in.--MWAK (talk) 08:31, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments, MWAK, I've made further changes accordingly. I've also added some maps back in. I've gone ahead and nominated it for GA-status. I'm sure any other, if any, issues with the article will be voiced there. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 12:13, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
I've been eyeing this page for some time now but I never achieved much except with the infobox and a few paragraphs. I like what you've done with it so far. You can count on my support. I own an 1100-page treatise on the operations of Army Group Center from the start of the invasion till the start of Operation Typhoon (Barbarossa Derailed Vol. 1 & 2 by Glantz), just in case sources for info are needed. EyeTruth (talk) 22:28, 22 March 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you very much EyeTruth. I see you did some minor changes as well, those are much appreciated. I, out of my GA experience, suspect that some sources will be questioned or asked to be removed, and in such an event, any Barbarossa-related books you have would be useful. With that being said, I double-checked about 1/3 of all sources used in the article when I rewrote and significantly improved it, and I'd say it has good chances of passing the GA-criteria. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 20:59, 23 March 2015 (UTC)
Bad source
led me to , which states Source #36 in this article is a fraud.
- Edit: "Hitler Speaks: A Series of Political Conversations With Adolf Hitler on His Real Aims" by Rauschning seems to be an unreliable source. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 204.234.74.238 (talk) 15:20, 20 March 2015 (UTC)
- Never mind; I discovered what the IHR really was. 204.234.74.238 (talk) 14:28, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
Einsatzgruppen inclusion?
As the article stands now, there is only one passing mention of the Einsatzgruppen units, and only in the context of anti-partisan operations. Should we include more on the Einsatzgruppen killings in the East? I'd be interested in working on it in cooperation with any others interested.
GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 23:42, 21 March 2015 (UTC)
- Good catch. The Einsatzgruppen backed by the Orpo battalions were a major terror instrument behind the front lines. I'm puzzled how this article existed for so long without even one proper paragraph about them. Poeticbent talk 00:49, 22 March 2015 (UTC)
- Agreed. Will include a paragraph or two about Einsatz involvement in Barbarossa as soon as I've finished my dinner. Well spotted guys. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:01, 23 March 2015 (UTC)
- Good catch. The Einsatzgruppen backed by the Orpo battalions were a major terror instrument behind the front lines. I'm puzzled how this article existed for so long without even one proper paragraph about them. Poeticbent talk 00:49, 22 March 2015 (UTC)
While you're at it, the article provides no coverage of the mass murder of Soviet civilians or POWs. This should note that the regular Germany Army was heavily involved in these atrocities. Nick-D (talk) 10:34, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
- Also agreed. Will add a whole section for war crimes. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:09, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
- Nick-D, I have added a whole section regarding war crimes. Tell me what you think. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
- The opening sentence, which implies that the Germans could do whatever they felt like with Soviet POWs, is really troubling: they could not (legally, or morally - see ). It also doesn't note that Hitler ordered that all of the political representatives who routinely formed part of Soviet military units (the Commissar Order) and many officers were to be murdered when taken prisoner: both were judged to be major war crimes after the war. Covering the massive number of murders of civilians which were an integral part of Operation Barabarossa in a single and inaccurate sentence ("Special SS killing squads like the Einzatsgruppen and Reichssicherheitshauptamt murdered tens of thousands of people behind the front lines") is also not sensible. Modern literature on this campaign notes that the mass murders were planned well ahead of the campaign and formed an important feature of it, and that the German military and local civilians played important roles in the murders. Nick-D (talk) 10:28, 25 March 2015 (UTC)
- Nick-D, the opening sentence does not indicated that the Germans whatever they felt like with Soviet POW's. It states, as it did before my improvement, that the Russians could not count on the protection stimulated in the Geneva Conventions. Regarding your other comments, I have added some words about the Commissar Order and made some other changes as well. Let me know what you think now. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:24, 25 March 2015 (UTC)
- The Russian POWs might not have had the legal protections provided by the Geneva Conventions, but they were protected by other laws of war (not to mention basic standards of humanity). The coverage of the crimes conducted against civilians remains grossly inadequate: this was a core part of the German invasion plans, but are accorded less space in the article than the Luftwaffe's activities in the first few weeks of the war gets. Nick-D (talk) 09:49, 26 March 2015 (UTC)
- Nick-D, the opening sentence does not indicated that the Germans whatever they felt like with Soviet POW's. It states, as it did before my improvement, that the Russians could not count on the protection stimulated in the Geneva Conventions. Regarding your other comments, I have added some words about the Commissar Order and made some other changes as well. Let me know what you think now. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:24, 25 March 2015 (UTC)
- The opening sentence, which implies that the Germans could do whatever they felt like with Soviet POWs, is really troubling: they could not (legally, or morally - see ). It also doesn't note that Hitler ordered that all of the political representatives who routinely formed part of Soviet military units (the Commissar Order) and many officers were to be murdered when taken prisoner: both were judged to be major war crimes after the war. Covering the massive number of murders of civilians which were an integral part of Operation Barabarossa in a single and inaccurate sentence ("Special SS killing squads like the Einzatsgruppen and Reichssicherheitshauptamt murdered tens of thousands of people behind the front lines") is also not sensible. Modern literature on this campaign notes that the mass murders were planned well ahead of the campaign and formed an important feature of it, and that the German military and local civilians played important roles in the murders. Nick-D (talk) 10:28, 25 March 2015 (UTC)
- Nick-D, I have added a whole section regarding war crimes. Tell me what you think. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:40, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
Television documentaries as WP:RS
To avoid confusion during the GA-review and also to clarify for others who might be wondering, I'm going to explain why I confidently believes that the television documentaries I've included in this article during my improvement are reliable.
- Hitler Strikes East (2009) is a documentary made by World Media Rights which documents the Eastern Front between 1941 to 1943. The documentary helpfully shows in the end credits that it's sources include the Imperial War Museum, the Library of Congress and the Ministry of Defense in London. It's primarily researcher is Benjamin Schwarz, notable American historian with a B.A. and an M.A. in history from Yale University.
- General Wilhelm Keitel: The Lackey (1998) is a documentary made by respected German historian Guido Knopp. The documentary includes plenty of interviews with surviving veterans and other surviving POW's, giving a very reliable picture of the events in question. Furthermore, it reveals original SS and OKW documents signed by Keitel and other top Nazi chieftains when referring to controversial matters.
- Operation Barbarossa (2011) is a hugely detailed documentary citing the events before, during and after Barbarossa. It's written by Russian historians Anna Grazhdan, Artem Drabkin and Aleksey Isaev for Star Media. It also shows plenty of original Hitler-signed documents as well as other OKW orders when referring to controversial subjects. The documentary focuses mainly on military factors, not political factors and therefore does not included any certain bias.
- The Battle for Russia (1994) is a 2-hour long documentary citing battles in Russia from 1941 to 1942, written by John Erickson, a British historian from University of Edinburgh. It's also hugely detailed. On of it's primary sources include the Russian Central Military Archives in Moscow.
- The Dark Charisma of Adolf Hitler is a documentary that examines Hitler's life from his years in Munich to the Führerbunker 1945. It's written by respective historians Laurence Rees and Ian Kershaw, both regarded as experts on the subject.
- The Fatal Attraction of Adolf Hitler (1989) is a documentary about Hitler's life from birth to death, made by Bill Treharne Jones and Christopher Andrew from Cambridge University for the BBC. Some of it's outside sources include Yad Vashem.
Given the reasons stated above, I put my faith in these specific television documentaries and considered them reliable. Cheers, Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 17:34, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
- John Erickson... I've read one of his works (but never finished it). He is a thorough historian. Anyways, the problem with documentaries is that they are often not created by experts on the subject, rather the experts are consulted. The filmmakers of 300 also consulted historians during production. The point is that getting advise and/or interviews from experts doesn't make the work anywhere as credible as a work created by the experts themselves. But I want to believe that many of us will agree that in the complete unavailability of more reliable sources, documentaries can suffice. EyeTruth (talk) 00:50, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Given the vast, and generally high quality, recent literature on this topic, I doubt that there's a need to consult TV documentaries. Nick-D (talk) 01:27, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- I completely agree. In the meantime though, there should be no haste in removing the documentaries, but they'll need to eventually go as more reliable sources are added. EyeTruth (talk) 01:44, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- I don't have any World War II books at my house, and therefore is depended on what I can find on Google Books. However, there is no need to actually replace these documentaries; if you, or someone else, happen to fall over a source which can replace one or two cites to the documentaries, then by all means, but no need to actively seek other sources as these specific documentaries should be considered reliable. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 02:16, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- I completely agree. In the meantime though, there should be no haste in removing the documentaries, but they'll need to eventually go as more reliable sources are added. EyeTruth (talk) 01:44, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Given the vast, and generally high quality, recent literature on this topic, I doubt that there's a need to consult TV documentaries. Nick-D (talk) 01:27, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
Albert Weeks
I am a little confused over the citation to Weeks 1998. The ISBN given belongs to an other book by an other author. Perhaps the correct citation should be an article Weeks wrote in a journal the given year. Weeks, Albert L. (November 1998). "Was Hitler 'forced' into attacking Russia? New evidence and analysis by revisionist historians". World War II. 13 (4): 12. With the following abstract: "Reports on the assertion of historians that Adolf Hitler's decision to invade the Soviet Union in June 1941 during World War II was motivated. Agreements signed by Hitler and Josef Stalin in their joint initiatives of 1939 to 1940; Views of revisionists that aggressive actions by Stalin and Foreign Minister Vyacheslav Molotov alarmed and infuriated Hitler; Discussion on the issue of the motivations for Operation Barbarossa."
But then the current page numer is incorrect. I am thinking that maybe the correct book is Weeks, Albert L. (2002). Stalin’s Other War: Soviet Grand Strategy, 1939–1941. Rowman & Littlefield. ISBN 978-0-7425-2191-9. {{cite book}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help), where information that could be the cited content is presented, per this review. Any thoughts? P. S. Burton (talk) 14:06, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- A lot of errors were introduced into the citations during Jonas Vinther's huge revamp of the article, but don't hold it against him
/her. Go ahead and correct any citation that looks misplaced. EyeTruth (talk) 19:14, 28 March 2015 (UTC)- I can openly say that most of the new sources I brought to the table where television documentaries (as I don't have access to a whole lot of books), and only converted the sources and page citification's that were already implemented into Harvard references. Regarding Weeks 1998, I suppose stand correct Burton. I agree with EyeTruth, be bold and correct away! Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:12, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- All your edits were clearly done in very good faith. And I believe other editors appreciate them as much as I do. EyeTruth (talk) 23:14, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- The error is now fixed. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:38, 30 March 2015 (UTC)
- All your edits were clearly done in very good faith. And I believe other editors appreciate them as much as I do. EyeTruth (talk) 23:14, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- I can openly say that most of the new sources I brought to the table where television documentaries (as I don't have access to a whole lot of books), and only converted the sources and page citification's that were already implemented into Harvard references. Regarding Weeks 1998, I suppose stand correct Burton. I agree with EyeTruth, be bold and correct away! Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:12, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
Kirchubel 1997
Hi. There is a ref in the artikel to Kirchubel 1997. But we do not hade any book published by him that year in the list of sources. Should it perhaps be Kirchubel 2003? Kirchubel 2005? Kirchubel 2007? or maybe Krivosheev 1997? P. S. Burton (talk) 10:56, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Will look into this, give me a sec. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 11:54, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Yup, can see through the article history that it's meant to be Krivosheev 1997. A typo I caused during my improvement; now fixed. Well spotted. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 12:05, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- God job. I could not find it in the article history myself. There is also a Kirchubel 2012 that needs to bee corrected. P. S. Burton (talk) 14:42, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Will check into this. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:15, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Is now fixed. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:41, 30 March 2015 (UTC)
- Will check into this. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:15, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- God job. I could not find it in the article history myself. There is also a Kirchubel 2012 that needs to bee corrected. P. S. Burton (talk) 14:42, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
- Yup, can see through the article history that it's meant to be Krivosheev 1997. A typo I caused during my improvement; now fixed. Well spotted. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 12:05, 28 March 2015 (UTC)
Soviet offensive plans
Background section too long?
Edit conflict
Article length
Shaky reference in an inappropriate section?
Change text
Picture in racial policy section
This edit
GA nomination
Recent edits by T16T17T12345
No mention of Stalingrad in the intro?
Reviewer: Delldot (talk · contribs) 17:46, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
GA Review
- This review is transcluded from Talk:Operation Barbarossa/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Hi, I'm undertaking to review this with input from my dad, who's a big history buff with a passion for WWII. We've done this several times, e.g. with Winter War. But don't get discouraged by the massiveness of the review, I'll mention things I think need improvement, but I'm certainly willing to listen to reason if you disagree, and I won't insist that everything be changed in order to meet GA standards. Comments coming soon! delldot ∇. 17:46, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks very much! GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 18:06, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Delldot, thank you very much for taking on the review. Glad to hear you will receive some help from your father - the more eyes on the article the better. Also, given the historical importance of this article, a thorough review would be greatly appreciated. Lastly, I got a lot of things going on right now so I would appreciate if you, or someone else, would ping me when my attention is needed. Cheers and happy holidays. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 18:24, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
First part
Here's my first part of the review. I'll have to do the rest later, but figured I'd give you a chance to start looking at these first. Don't be dismayed, this is mostly cosmetic copy-editing issues that will be quick fixes.
It's already really top-notch. Very well organized and flows well, impeccably cited. I have not been able to detect any problem with bias (although my dad points out after every sentence that it has all been exhaustively debated by historians). There’s a tendency toward long, difficult-to-follow sentences, so watch for that as you’re copy editing.
- Racial policies of Nazi Germany
- ‘’ Hitler in Mein Kampf said Germany's destiny was to "turn to the East" as it did "six hundred years ago".’’ Maybe there could be a footnote here to explain what he’s referring to.
- Good idea.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Good idea.
- Run-on: ‘’ The plan envisaged wholesale removal of the majority of the populations of conquered counties with very small differing percentages of the various conquered nations undergoing Germanisation, expulsion into the depths of Russia, and other fates, the net effect of which would be to ensure that the conquered territories would be Germanized.’’
- Sorry, I don't understand this? Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry, I meant that this seems like a long, meandering sentence that's hard to understand. Could you maybe split it into two sentences? Maybe a period after 'fates'. delldot ∇. 01:47, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Yes, sure no problem.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 10:16, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Yes, sure no problem.
- Sorry, I meant that this seems like a long, meandering sentence that's hard to understand. Could you maybe split it into two sentences? Maybe a period after 'fates'. delldot ∇. 01:47, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry, I don't understand this? Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- German-Soviet relations of 1939–40
- try to avoid easter egg links like here: ‘’ As a result of the pact, Germany and the Soviet Union had reasonably strong diplomatic relations and an important economic relationship.’’ This exists throughout the article, so try to make the links as unsurprising as possible for a reader who follows them as you’re editing.
- Will do.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Will do.
- German invasion plans
- The colors of the map in the image should be explained in the caption. The image itself is in German. And occupied countries like France and Belgium are grey.
- How right you are, will fix ASAP.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- How right you are, will fix ASAP.
- If this quote is from Hitler, shouldn’t it be in the first person? Or you could take off the quotation marks. Or is the quote from the general? ‘’While no concrete plans were made yet, Hitler told one of his generals in June that the victories in Western Europe "finally freed his hands for his important real task: the showdown with Bolshevism".’’
- Good idea.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Good idea.
- Split up this run-on sentence: ‘’ Although German generals warned Hitler that occupying Western Russia would create "more of a drain than a relief for Germany's economic situation", the Führer anticipated additional benefits, like the demobilization of entire divisions to relieve the acute labor shortage in German industry, Ukraine becoming a reliable source of immense agricultural products, forced labor under German rule vastly stimulating Germany's overall economy, and the expansion of territory to improve Germany's geostrategic position which would further isolate Britain.’’
- Will do.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Will do.
- Why is the table restricted to 50% width? It looks kind of squished up and too tall, with a lot of whitespace. I’d make it 80 or 90% and centered.
- Tweaked.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Tweaked.
- Soviet preparations
- ‘’Defense expenditure also grew rapidly: from just 5 percent of gross national product in 1913, to 12 percent in 1933, and by 1940 it stood at 18 percent.’’ Isn’t it a bit weird to include 1913 in this comparison? It was a totally different society before 1917.
- Totally right, removed.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Totally right, removed.
- This sentence needs cleanup: ‘’ The Soviets held a clear numerical advantage in tanks that numbered more than 20,000, of which about 11,000 were in the western military districts that faced the German invasion forces, which had about 3,350 tanks.’’
- Done.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Done.
- Is this apostrophe placement correct, making tank singular? ‘’ "If I had known about the Russian tank's strength in 1941 I would not have attacked".’’ Or should it be tanks’?
- Well spotted, fixed.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Well spotted, fixed.
- if you decide to go for FA status it might be good to turn the table “Development of the Soviet Armed Forces” into a chart, like a bar graph, to have an easy visual representation. I wouldn’t demand that now though.
- Temping suggestion, but lets make it pass GA-review first. :)
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Temping suggestion, but lets make it pass GA-review first. :)
- This sentence doesn’t flow well into the rest of the paragraph: ‘’ Prior to the invasion, the Soviet Air Force (VVS) was forbidden to shoot down Luftwaffe reconnaissance aircraft, despite hundreds of prewar incursions into Soviet airspace.’’ I want to hear more about why not: because of the pact? Intimidation? The rest of the para is about relative numbers.
- Added more detail.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Added more detail.
- Invasion
- ‘’ Joseph Goebbels announced the invasion to the waking nation in a radio broadcast, "At this moment a march is taking place that, for its extent, compares with the greatest the world has ever seen. I have decided today to place the fate and future of the Reich and our people in the hands of our soldiers. May God aid us, especially in this fight!"[’ This must be a quote from Hitler, right? It’s confusing.
Quite right, it is Hitler, have tweaked. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)- EyeTruth has informed me that it actually was Goebbles who made said the quote in question.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 00:37, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- EyeTruth has informed me that it actually was Goebbles who made said the quote in question.
- Phase one
- Is this correct? ‘’ with the aid of Abwehr troops operating in the Soviet rear paralyzed its communication lines’’. Looks like Abwehr were spies. Wouldn’t it be paratroopers or airborn?
- Its actually legit. Added, however, detail on other helpers.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Its actually legit. Added, however, detail on other helpers.
- Historical significance
- This is such a small section. I wonder if the info could be incorporated elsewhere and this section dissolved. It does seem like a good way to wrap up the article though. Any chance of fleshing it out? It would still be GA-worthy either way though.
- The indeed is very small; could do good with an expansion. I will keep it a section for itself and do my best to expanded it add some more detail. Cheers.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- The indeed is very small; could do good with an expansion. I will keep it a section for itself and do my best to expanded it add some more detail. Cheers.
Let me know your thoughts on these remarks and I'll add more in a bit. delldot ∇. 20:10, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Delldot, thank you very much for your thorough review. I have responded and made edits according your comments. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:43, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Fantastic work, remarkably fast! I hope to have the rest reviewed tomorrow. delldot ∇. 01:47, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Sounds great. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 10:16, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Fantastic work, remarkably fast! I hope to have the rest reviewed tomorrow. delldot ∇. 01:47, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
Second part
Thanks Jonas Vinther and GeneralizationsAreBad for the excellent work so far. Here's my last set of comments.
- Phase 3
- 4th Panzer Army had penetrated to within 30 mi (48 km) earlier it used just kilometers, spelled out. This should be consistent. There are lots more instances of this usage, sometimes with mi first, sometimes km.
- Quite right, fixed.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- There are still some instances of 8 km (5.0 mi), 200 mi (320 km), sixteen kilometres, 48 kilometers, and so on. I bet WP:MILHIST has a style guideline for which of these to use. delldot ∇. 00:19, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- Quite right, fixed.
- This was confusing to me: These attacks drew Hitler's attention back to Army Group Center and its drive on Moscow. This is the first we’re hearing about Moscow since the drive was suspended at the end of phase 2. Does this sentence mean that the attacks changed Hitler’s mind and caused him to decide to go for Moscow? Or did that happen earlier?
- Long story, but, as the article explained in "German preparations", Hitler regarded Moscow as relatively unimportant, but the stubborn resistance by the Red Army compelled him to shift his attention back to Moscow after some months of fighting. Good job, however, in noticing its the first time this is mentioned after that early section; will tweak it for clarity.
:) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Long story, but, as the article explained in "German preparations", Hitler regarded Moscow as relatively unimportant, but the stubborn resistance by the Red Army compelled him to shift his attention back to Moscow after some months of fighting. Good job, however, in noticing its the first time this is mentioned after that early section; will tweak it for clarity.
- weather conditions grounded the Luftwaffe from conducting any large scale operations. Is large-scale supposed to be hyphenated?
- Tweaked.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Tweaked.
- This sounds a little awkward but I can’t figure out how to fix it: over 830,000 casualties in killed, wounded, captured or gone missing in action. It’s the ‘in’ I don’t like. Maybe over 830,000 German soldiers were killed, wounded, captured or missing in action and the Germans had lost the Battle for Moscow. It’s not perfect though.
- I agree, tweaked it per your suggestion.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- I agree, tweaked it per your suggestion.
- War crimes
- The Soviet Union had not participated in the Geneva Conventions and therefore their troops could not rely on the protection the Conventions guaranteed soldiers during times of war. Is this to suggest that signing the convention would have protected them? Is there evidence that Hitler had honored the convention with signatories elsewhere?
- Well, Germany did not kill the vast majority of the 2 million French troops imprisoned in Germany throughout the entire war. Personally, I don't think Hitler would have held the convention in high regard even if they had signed it, but the Geneva Convention was the biggest and most notable treaty of war before the start of Operation Barbarossa so its important that they had not signed it - what would have happened if they did sign is a matter of speculation. Let me know if you want some specific tweaks or points made.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Well, Germany did not kill the vast majority of the 2 million French troops imprisoned in Germany throughout the entire war. Personally, I don't think Hitler would have held the convention in high regard even if they had signed it, but the Geneva Convention was the biggest and most notable treaty of war before the start of Operation Barbarossa so its important that they had not signed it - what would have happened if they did sign is a matter of speculation. Let me know if you want some specific tweaks or points made.
- I’m not sure ‘industrial’ is the right word here. Organized crimes against civilians, including women and children, were also carried out on an industrial scale by the Germans and local supporters.
- Tweaked.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Tweaked.
- I’d like to see a little more info in this section. How many civilians were starved? What happened to the people in Leningrad in the siege? How many civilians were killed and in what manner?
- I've expanded it as best I could; let me know if you're satisfied.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC) - Leningrad material has been added.
GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 22:01, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- I've expanded it as best I could; let me know if you're satisfied.
- Aftermath
- I think this section should come right after Phase 4. It’s still giving chronological info, while the War crimes section is more general about the whole campaign. I would switch the order of these two sections.
- Quite right. :)
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Quite right. :)
- Nevertheless, despite this setback, the Soviet Union had suffered heavily from the loss of large parts of its army and industry, allowing the Germans to mount another large-scale offensive Maybe despite this success? or Nevertheless, despite this setback for the Germans?
- Tweaked.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Tweaked.
- So what was the precise end of Barbarossa? Did it end with the defeat at Moscow, so all of 1942 is ‘aftermath’? It says here they started calling it Case Blue in July 1942. Did that mark the end of Barbarossa, or was there just nothing going on from December to July? Did the operation of moving all the troops toward Stalingrad have a name?
- Barbarossa ended with defeat at Moscow.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Barbarossa ended with defeat at Moscow.
- By then, the Soviet war economy was fully operational and was able to simply outproduce Germany, which was not prepared for a long war of attrition.[37] The war ended with the total defeat and occupation of Nazi Germany in May 1945. The juxtaposition of these two sentences makes it look like losing Case Blue lost Germany the war. Maybe there could be one transition sentence between them about how these defeats affected Germany and set the stage for the rest of the war, if it’s possible to speculate.
- Tweaked per your suggestion.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Tweaked per your suggestion.
- File:Einsatzgruppen Killing.jpg is a fair use image without a rationale for use on this page. I don’t think you’ll be able to use it since it says on the page this event took place in 1942; it’ll be hard to justify why you need it to illustrate an article about 1941. All of the rest of the images are legit.
- Removed.
Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Removed.
I think that’s all I got! delldot ∇. 17:35, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for your great review. To deal with the stuff I can answer...
-- Yes, I think hyphens should be put in.
-- As for the Geneva Conventions, I'm not sure. However, it's an important statement, so I will keep an eye on it.
-- If "industrial" isn't doing it, "systematic" might work.
-- I can add material on Leningrad if you like.
-- Case Blue was a separate operation entirely, launched in 1942 with the aim of conquering the oil fields in the Caucasus. This would be considered the operation that led to Stalingrad. From December to July, there was continued fighting in the Rzhev area, plus major battles at Demyansk and Kharkov, as well as myriad others that need not be dealt with here. That can be added, if you want.
-- Yes, I agree, more needs to be written on Case Blue and its aftermath and effects. As the article already says, Moscow marked the end of an "easy" victory for the Third Reich, and while some might argue it effectively meant total defeat, it was still not the end.
GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 19:16, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Delldot, I believe me and GeneralizationsAreBad have replied and acted according your comments. Please let us know if there is anything else, and thanks for the very helpful comments. :) Cheers, Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 21:07, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Delldot and Jonas Vinther, what are your opinions on where the Leningrad starvation paragraph should be located? It has been tentatively placed in Phase three, but I will move it elsewhere if need be. Best of luck, GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 22:06, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- GeneralizationsAreBad, I think Delldot wanted something about Leningrad in the "War Crimes" section which I already added before your addition; if this is case, I doubt yours is really needed. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:23, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Alright. I can delete it if you like. GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 22:25, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Actually, after reading it thoroughly through, I think its best if stays in. But lets hear Delldot's opinion. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:26, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- I think it's great info and it adds a lot since there's not a lot from the perspective of the soviet civilians. But it doesn't really work where it is, since that section is mainly about German troop movements, and the previous para is about Kiev. Would it make sense to add that info to the war crimes section too? Or would that make it too long? delldot ∇. 00:28, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks, and good call. I'll move it to the bottom. GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 00:47, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- Actually, after reading it thoroughly through, I think its best if stays in. But lets hear Delldot's opinion. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 22:26, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- Can we just get this last thing cited? The most advanced Soviet tank models, the T-34 and KV-1, were not available in large numbers early in the war, and only accounted for 7 percent of the total Soviet tank force.[37][not in citation given]
After that, I think this thoroughly meets GA criteria, so I'm going to go ahead and promote it. I hope you will keep improving it (e.g. adding that footnote about the 600 years, the sentence about how the operation set the stage for the rest of the war before the final sentence in aftermath, continuing to fill out EGG links like 'never returned alive') but that can happen over time. Great work, folks! delldot ∇. 01:05, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- Delldot, I have been informed Ridder 2007 is not a reliable source; I will therefore replace it, and also find a source for the sentence you listed above; will ping when I'm done. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:28, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- Delldot I'm confident everything about the article is now in fine order and no further source or content issues exist. Please take a last glance at the article and let me know if there is anything further. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:48, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- Ugly Ketchup pointed out that there are two separate numbers provided for Axis tank losses, neither of which are sourced. That might be worth fixing. GeneralizationsAreBad (talk) 16:04, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- That would indeed be worth fixing. Will get right on it! Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 17:42, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- The Axis error is now fixed. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 17:54, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- The Soviet error is also now fixed. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 18:05, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- The Axis error is now fixed. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 17:54, 16 May 2015 (UTC)
- That would indeed be worth fixing. Will get right on it! Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 17:42, 16 May 2015 (UTC)