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A good article is...
Well-written:
Prose:
She is a Halovian, an angel-like species with wings on her head and a halo-like accessory near her head – you describe her in the context of her species while still using person pronouns. Try "she is a Halovian, an angel-like species, and has wings and a halo-like accessory near her head..."
On April 29, 2024, an EasyCard collaboration card available for purchase in Taiwan which featured Robin – missing verb.
miHoYo also filmed a public welfare documentary, in which hearing-impaired children sung "Hope Is the Thing With Feathers". – should be "sang".
Celine Jaeckel of EarlyGame called her adorable and "oh-so-cute" and that it was hard for her not to fall in love with Robin. – "and said that"?
Based on the few words she does speak, after she leaves March 7th indicates that Robin's voice is not how she remembers it, and that something is off. – I cannot parse this, please rephrase.
- Clarified that she does say a few words
Gallagher instead accuses Sunday of betraying the Harmony instead – clunky repetition.
She speculated that Robin may have had a similar disease such as Firefly's Entropy Loss Syndrome, which she argues could have explained Robin's vocal issues. – please rephrase to avoid shifting tense mid-sentence.
- Changed "argues" to past tense
Nazuka added that Robin was very strong, but that she would not impose that strength on others, hence Nazuka made sure to use words that came across as well-refined and gentle – try to remove repetition of "Nazuka".
Even her later singing career and fighting spirit stem from that. – verging on conversational, rephrase with a tightening on what "that" actually is.
- I don't think it is conversational, but removed anyways as unnecessary.
which causes Robin to use her Halovian powers to rectify that – vague; try "to fix this".
Later, the Trailblazer tries to enter the Dreamscape again, but finds Robin's body lying in the pool needed to enter the Dreamscape. – rephrase to avoid repetition.
- Not done, as I think mentioning the Dreamscape by name is necessary to avoid potential confusion
There is an otherworldly purple slash across her body, which dissipates into nothingness. – vague: does the slash disappear, or does the body?
- The body; clarified. Personally I don't think it was vague the way I had it though, but reworded anyway
He said this would happen to everyone equally across Penacony – also vague. Specify what "this" is.
- Clarified that 'this' refers to the same thing that happened to Robin earlier in the paragraph
Robin's appearance and characterization received some level of praise – "some level" is very vague. Could easily just say "Robin's appearance and characterization also received praise".
several voice actresses, as well as producing several songs for her – repetition.
At first on the extended play were three songs, all sung by Chevy as Robin – awkward phrasing; I don't see a need for inversion. Try "the extended play initially featured..."
On June 22, the release date of Version 2.3, the fourth song "Had I Not Seen The Sun" was also released – consider using dashes to make this appositive less clunky.
- I just removed the part mentioning version 2.3
Good Smile Company announced a collaboration with miHoYo to release nendoroid figures of Sunday and Robin for pre-order on December 24, 2024, and that the toys would be available the following August at a cost of 7,500 Japanese yen – "and that" is too awkward. Consider splitting into two sentences.
- Done (even though I don't think this is awkward)
Both public welfare platforms and games have a common attribute in that they can connect people and resources – wordy. Try "...share a common feature: the ability to connect people and resources."
- Not done: I don't really think this is very wordy. I did swap out "attribute" to "feature" though.
- Link drip marketing.
- Didn't even know that was an article; done
- "Crowd control debuffs" could do with a link to a glossary, like is done with "ultimate".
- Opening paragraph of §Creation and design falls into the trap of "In [blank] ... In [blank]" repetition in a date-led structure. Please vary the phrasing here.
- I don't really think so (for instance, the last sentence ends with the date; it doesn't start with the date), but I did reword one sentence in it
- "Sway To My Beat" vs. "Sway to My Beat": pick one.
- "Dreamscape" is sometimes capitalised, and sometimes not.
- Only one instance was needed to be fixed (d → D)
her songs intend to soothe pain – songs don't intend. Try "are intended to".
merge reality and the dream together – "together" is redundant.
- Not really sure if this is redundant or not as the word "together" emphasizes it even more, but done anyways
confused by the fact that the bird – wordy: "confused that".
- Not done: I don't think this is wordy
MoS:
- Could really do with glosses for some of the in-universe terms, like Aeon, Stellaron, Charmony Festival, Dreammaster, Astral Express, etc.
- Done ("Dreammaster" is defined already in the article as Penacony's ruler); either added in glosses or removed the name entirely where needed (e.g. "Astral Express" -> "the Trailblazer and friends").
- Please use one system of displaying numbers per MOS:NUM. We have 10/ten, among others.
- Please commit to either using a serial comma or not.
- Think I've removed all the unnecessary commas
- Lead is quite light and does not cover everything. The disability advocacy and death speculation sections definitely merit a mention, but that's not exhaustive.
- "Promotion" could easily be a subheading of §Creation and design.
- Article formatting for fictional characters (or at least, the ones I've worked on that have gotten to GA) indicates the promotion section goes where it currently is, right before the reception section. Can't put my finger on why exactly, but something's telling me that section would feel out of place to some people if it was moved there. Other editors are of course free to move it if they deem it necessary, but I'm not really seeing much of a reason to personally. In solidarity, Gommeh (talk 🎮 sign) 01:40, 30 July 2026 (UTC)
- Italics for INSIDE, not quotes.
Verifiable with no original research:
Reference layout:
- Contains a reference list of all sources used.
Reliable sources:
- What makes ONE Esports a reliable source?
- Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Video games/Sources/Archive 36#ONE Esports - discussion indicates it is situational on the Chinese Wikipedia. Since we haven't had an in-depth discussion on it here (despite my efforts to start one, not a lot of people participated in it) it is "presumed" situationally reliable here. The Chinese editors are very thorough in their source assessments, so I trust their judgment.
- What makes EarlyGame a reliable source?
- Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Video games/Sources/Archive 39#EarlyGame - discussion does not indicate much of a consensus. A previous discussion found them unreliable (in part due to not having posted an editorial policy at the time), but the fact they later did post one gave me more hope in terms of reliability. Anyway, I have not had any issues regarding their usability in past GAs.
Original research and copyright violations (spotchecks):
- Ref 5: pass
- Ref 7: pass
- Ref 8: pass
- Ref 23: pass
Broad in its coverage:
Broad:
- Robin • Summeretto is given a whole sentence in the lead, but only a few words in the body. Either this is not important enough for the lead, or we are missing coverage
- There isn't a lot of information available about her yet, since miHoYo hasn't released anything officially. There have been leaks, but those aren't always reliable and at any rate they haven't been covered in any reliable sources as far as I know. When they do release information on Summeretto, I will be sure to update the article.
- No reception of her playstyle/kit?
- Couldn't find anything in terms of that
- No mention of Eidolons or Light Cones?
- I'm sure including that would be a violation of WP:NOTGUIDE, so I'm not doing that
Focused:
Neutral:
- Quite a lot of time is given to glossing parts of the interview with Nazuka, which is a primary source. Potentially this could be trimmed slightly.
- Removed one sentence; not really sure what (if any) other parts would be best trimmed
- Reception is entirely positive. Is this representative of the whole?
- The §Disability advocacy section is entirely sourced to one webpage and toes the line between neutrality and promotion. It could do with either trimming for balance or rephrasing.
- Removed material that may be seen by some as promotional (even though I disagree)
Stable:
- Article has no existing edit wars or content disputes.
Illustrated:
Free or tagged images:
Relevance:
- @UpTheOctave!: I don't really see much of a difference between the cropped and non-cropped versions of the photo in terms of MOS. In the end, they both show the same thing. In solidarity, Gommeh (talk 🎮 sign) 00:56, 30 July 2026 (UTC)
- What I'm getting at is whether this is actually a worthwhile image to include, since almost none of the cosplay is actually visible. UpTheOctave! • 8va? 01:06, 30 July 2026 (UTC)
- Putting a new one in now. In solidarity, Gommeh (talk 🎮 sign) 01:24, 30 July 2026 (UTC)
- @UpTheOctave!: the source that discussed this was removed for being unreliable; guess I simply forgot to get rid of the picture when I took out the text. Removed. In solidarity, Gommeh (talk 🎮 sign) 00:56, 30 July 2026 (UTC)
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