Talk:The Reality War/GA1

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Nominator: TheDoctorWho (talk · contribs) 05:20, 12 June 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk · contribs) 02:38, 14 June 2025 (UTC)

Hey, since I have reviewed most episodes from this season I thought I would review this one :D Well done on your hard work! Here are my comments for improvement:

Lead: I think a sentence about the deleted scenes and the delay to production would be beneficial here.  Done

Infobox: I would honestly remove "2nd of 2-part story" from this infobox and "Wish World"'s one, as the information in the lead explains that it is the second part of the story and having it in this section suggests that the two episodes are 66 minutes in total.  Not done - This format has been the standard for years and would likely necessitate a project-wide discussion outside the scope of this review

Plot:

1. Could you briefly explain who Anita is?  Done
2. Could you please briefly explain why Conrad wished for the earth to be in a time loop? I know it is because he is working with the Rani etc, but why is this?  Done
3. "reminding him of how he would save her as a baby as well" - I was a bit confused by this? Could you perhaps please reword?  Done - this actually happened so made it past tense with end note

Development:

1. "throughout the era" - Could you please clarify this? Does this mean the past two series or longer? Also, can you please give examples?  Done
2. "After warning prior to release that it "shakes up the lore of Gallifrey", Davies included an explanation for the concept of "bigeneration"—a twist on the long-time concept of regeneration—that was first seen in "The Giggle" (2023) was given" - I think this needs rewording as I struggled to understand it. Also, what does "it" refer to?  Done - the "was given" at the end wasn't necessary and from a former version of the sentence, I think that makes it clearer (along with the clarification of it)
3. "Doctor falling to his death on a balcony" - Should it be "from" a balcony?  Not done - the whole balcony literally fell off the building with the Doctor in it 😅
4. "creating the Time Hotel for "Joy to the World" provided him a solution to that concept" - Could you please explain how it gave him that solution?  Done

Casting:

1. "led some to believe" - Could you please clarify if this was viewers, critics or both (or others) believing this?  Done - its all (I guess) so reworded to avoid needing to name a specific group
2. "while Jonah Hauer-King, Ruth Madeley, Michelle Greenidge, Sienna-Robyn Mavanga-Phipps, Jemma Redgrave, Susan Twist, Alexander Devrient, Bonnie Langford, and Angela Wynter reprise their roles from the previous episode" - Could you please say who they portray?  Done
3. Could you please briefly add that Capaldi and Tennant played Whittaker's predecessor and successor to give context with readers unfamiliar with this fact?  Done

Filming and post-production:

1. Could you briefly explain what the "action sequences" are? As there are many scenes that could fit this criteria Already done - specifically says action sequences on a personal transporter
2. The page for Day of the Daleks says that it was broadcast in 1972, so I fixed it slightly Already done - by you
3. "practical Dalek prop on set "to tie it altogether"." - Could you please perhaps slightly expand on this to explain what "tie it altogether" means? I do not see the link between that and the prompt and other readers may have the same issue  Done
4. "Principal photography on the series" - Could you please specify that it was the fifteenth series?  Done
5. "Susan Foreman, a character portrayed by Carole Ann Ford who was re-introduced to the programme as the Doctor's granddaughter two episodes prior after an absence of over forty years, and Ruby" - This sentence is quite long and can be a bit confusing - could you potentially please cut it into two sentences if possible?  Done
6. Is there any information on when filming/production finally finished?  Not done - Sadly not, the final mix date is the best we have

Broadcast and reception:

1. "It is the first global simulcast of an episode" - Could you please clarify if this is just DW episodes or all television episodes?  Done
2. Could you please clarify what "consolidated figures" means?  Done
3. "Piper's return to the programme was met with more mixed reviews and controversey" - Could you please expand on this a bit?  Done
4. Since a lot of critics here criticise the sideling/character arc of Belinda, could you potentially explain why they felt she had a bad finish/how she was sidelined?  Done

Once these have been addressed, I will do a source spotcheck and pass the article - please let me know if you have any questions at all or need help! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 02:38, 14 June 2025 (UTC)

@DaniloDaysOfOurLives: I believe everything has been addressed here; as usual, thanks for the review! TheDoctorWho (talk) 05:27, 18 June 2025 (UTC)

Hey, thank you so much for the changes, they look great! Just one minor comment - in the reception, could you please replace "bookended" as many readers may not know what it means and the definitions on google etc aren't 100% consistent. However, it is not a major issue so I am going to pass this, well done! I have spotchecked Sources #1, #5, #9, #15, #28 and #32. Well done again :D DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 03:43, 19 June 2025 (UTC)