User:SpringSummerAutumn/Sandbox
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notes to self: "how would an academic journal present this?"
Reliability
Hello, nice to see people working on wine-related articles. However, your articles, while referenced, are way too promotional in tone. Look at the first sentence of the Margaret River (wine region), for example: "Margaret River is one of the most immediately recognised wine regions of Australia by both domestic and international audiences." That's not how an encyclopedic entry should start, following WP:NPOV and WP:LEAD! I recommend Wikipedia:Wikipedia is not a wine guide for reading! Regards, Tomas e (talk) 12:25, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
- If it helps, my trick for figuring out wording is "how would an academic journal present this?" It does come out sounding a bit dry, but it generally works. A lot of my stuff is on obscure geographical and political topics so I concede this is probably easier to write about in such a form, although there's the moments where I'm writing and trying not to laugh, such as Mundingburra state by-election, 1996#Other_events. Orderinchaos 00:22, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
More copyvio?
Hello SpringSummerAutumn, could I ask you to have a second look at all the articles you have created, with the copyvio policy in mind? Looking at articles such as Concours Mondial de Bruxelles and Langton’s Classification of Australian Wine, they contain sentences which look like could very well have been lifted from somewhere else. Tomas e (talk) 13:36, 9 October 2009 (UTC)
Australia’s First Families of Wine
Hi and welcome to wikipedia, nice to have someone working on Australian wine!! I have seen you start working on especially australian wine pages, and seen you add lots of text about Australia’s First Families of Wine to multiple pages, I think this is a bit WP:ADS, I have not done anything about it, but now after you added the same to Henschke, I reverted it from there. I do not think that it is resonable to have 9 lines of text talking about this Australia’s First Families of Wine in a small article like that,it is questionable in my opinion if Australia’s First Families of Wine would survive an WP:AFD, but I normally do not list pages that is seams to be truthful and does exists, but we do not need the same text in 10 pages again and again. Please read WP:ADS, WP:POV and generally try to make the pages you update more ensyclopeadic, and not so sales related. --Stefan talk 08:18, 11 October 2009 (UTC)
Mergeto|Classification of wine|date=October 2009 Expand|date=September 2009
In 2003 Dr Ian J Rooke, professor of Ornithology, University of Western Australia identified 26 species of birds within the estate.[1]