Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/HIV/AIDS in New York City/archive1

HIV/AIDS in New York City

Nominator(s): BrillLyle (talk) 20:24, 3 July 2016 (UTC)

This article is about HIV/AIDS in New York City, was long-overdue, and was produced in connection with the La Guardia and Wagner Archives GLAM initiative by two graduate students who had spent 6 months using the unique resources of the archive to research and write this article. The page went live at a recent Wikimedia New York City Wiki Loves Pride 2016 editathon held at the Museum of Modern Art. I went through and cleaned up the citations to convert bare URLs and add ISBN and OCLC links but this amazing work was all done by the students under the direction of two active New York Wikipedians who use Wikipedia in their classes. Hope you will nominate this great work. Erika, aka BrillLyle (talk) 20:24, 3 July 2016 (UTC)

Oppose and suggest withdrawal. This is clearly an important article and I appreciate the amount of work that has been done thus far, but it's far from FA standard. There are whole paragraphs that are not cited, the timeline, which consists of bullet points, needs to be recast into professionally written prose. There are inaccuracies; the turning point was not "In the early 21st century," it was in 1996, when the efficacy of combination therapy became known. The references are riddled with primary sources, some of which are around thirty years old and fail WP:MEDRS. The Lead is too short and the prose needs much work and suffers from proseline throughout. The use of the word "patients" is questionable. I suggest a peer review and and Good Article assessment is more applicable than a nomination at FAC at this time. Graham Beards (talk) 21:39, 3 July 2016 (UTC)

• More - I have just deleted a dangerously inaccurate paragraph in which a drug for pneumocystis was confused with anti-retrovirals, and I have removed other inaccurate or out of date statements. I don't usually edit candidate articles, but I could not let some of this go uncorrected. Graham Beards (talk) 09:24, 4 July 2016 (UTC)

In addition to Graham Beards's concerns, the article only covers events of the late-70s and 80s, and yet the article's title implies that its scope is HIV/AIDS in NYC in general, not just during the 80s. HIV/AIDS in the United States (for all its other flaws) covers all the way up to 2015. As it is, I'm not sure that the article comes close to hitting criterion 1b. There are also two inline references which need to be fixed before this has any chance of being featured: one (currently #17) reads "citation needed from Tara"; the other (currently #42) reads "Ashton?". Caeciliusinhorto (talk) 08:42, 4 July 2016 (UTC)

• Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 13:36, 4 July 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback and helpful edits, the group behind the archives/student project accepts the withdrawal.--Pharos (talk) 15:21, 4 July 2016 (UTC)

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