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HPV vaccination in Japan
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I've listed this article for peer review because... I've listed this article for peer review because I am planning to nominate it for Good Article status and would appreciate feedback on any remaining issues, particularly those related to the current AI cleanup tag. Thanks, 流山隆一 (talk) 14:07, 7 June 2026 (UTC)
Z1720
Comments after a quick skim:
- The orange "AI" banner needs to be resolved before this is nominated. If you have copyedited the article and done a source check to ensure hallucinations are not in the article, then this can be removed.
- "The decision was reported internationally, including in Lancet Oncology." A sentence like this is not necessary in an article. It is better to describe what the source reported on in the article.
- There are a lot of short, one sentence paragraphs in the article. I recommend that most or all of these be merged into other paragraphs to help with readability.
- I think the timeline in "History" can be removed, and events related to the article content can be explained in prose instead.
- Some sections are quite long, affecting readability (especially for mobile users). I recommend that a section be about 2-4 paragraphs before a new section heading is used to break up the text, although 5 or 6 paragraphs could also be helpful.
- "Impact and consequences" is written as bullet points, but this should be written as prose instead.
- Consider adding additional images, perhaps of Japanese people receiving the vaccination, facilities where the vaccine is distributed, an image of the vaccine, or other images that might relate to a section.
I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 15:55, 9 June 2026 (UTC)
- @Z1720 Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I am very pleased to receive them.
- Regarding the AI tag, I once removed it myself, but it was later re-added. Since then, I have been asking various people in different places whether it can be removed again. However, perhaps because most of the sources are in Japanese, this has not yet been achieved.
- As for the timeline, I feel that removing it entirely would make it more difficult for readers to understand the overall context. Therefore, I would like to keep only the most important entries in the timeline and incorporate the remaining information into the main text.
- I will make the other revisions later as well.
- Thank you very much for your help and advice.~~~ 流山隆一 (talk) 22:02, 10 June 2026 (UTC)
- @Z1720 I have now completed all the revisions based on your feedback. The timeline has been removed entirely and the content integrated into the prose. Short single-sentence paragraphs have been merged, and the longer sections have been condensed. Would you be able to take a look and confirm whether the article is ready for GA nomination?~~~ 流山隆一 (talk) 15:19, 13 June 2026 (UTC)