Hi @Frost! I just wanted to discuss this paragraph from the Artistry section, as to avoid an edit war :)
Original version:
Interested in pop from a young age, Cissé grew up in listening to Frank Ocean, One Direction, and Justin Bieber as well as ABBA and Boney M through her mother.[1] She said One Direction's "Best Song Ever" helped her realise the "power of music… [and] creative visuals", as the group "didn't just release a song, they released a world".[2] As she grew older, she discovered a love for a more indie sound, citing Tame Impala as one of her main influences, particularly their albums Lonerism and Currents,[3][4] as well as the Strokes and Strawberry Guy.[5] She was drawn to how music made her feel, hether it was from Tame Impala, Frank Ocean or One Direction, and wanted to create that feeling for others.[6]
Edited version:
Interested in pop from a young age, Cissé grew up in listening to Frank Ocean, One Direction, and Justin Bieber as well as ABBA and Boney M through her mother.[7] She said One Direction's "Best Song Ever" helped her realise the "power of music… [and] creative visuals", as the group "didn't just release a song, they released a world".[8][9] as well as the Strokes and Strawberry Guy.[10]
I personally disagree that the Tame Impala mentions are promotional - the artist mentions Tame Impala as a major influence multiple times, thus it seems worth including. That said, I'm open to suggestions for re-wording in a way that doesn't remove the information in question.
Moreover, the edit creates a typo/grammatical error at the end. I also wouldn't remove the two sources even if the wording changes.
Starklinson (talk) 04:05, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
- The main issue is with the wording of
she discovered a love for a more indie sound
and She was drawn to how music made her feel, hether it was from Tame Impala, Frank Ocean or One Direction, and wanted to create that feeling for others
. They may not be in line with WP:VOICE and MOS:WTW. Frost 04:38, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
- I see. Would "she developed an interest in indie music" be better? Or something along those lines. I mostly want to keep the part about Tame Impala given her mentions of them, but the first part of the sentence can change.
- As for the other sentence, maybe a direct quote would help? It's based on this line from the Wonderland interview:
What sparked my interest to start making it was how I felt listening to other people's music such as Frank Ocean, Tame Impala, especially, and the nostalgia I get from One Direction. I want to re-create that feeling of nostalgia.
Starklinson (talk) 20:07, 7 January 2025 (UTC)
- Yup, it looks better. Frost 19:46, 8 January 2025 (UTC)
