Talk:One More Victim

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"the only child of two children of Russian Jewish immigrants"

That sentence bit sounds kind of weird. Does that mean that he was the only child of two second-generation Russian Jewish immigrants? Being the "only child of two children" is a really strange phrasing. Nakonana (talk) 16:00, 8 December 2025 (UTC)

Actually no, per the article on Dan Burros, the mother was a first-generation immigrant ("Esther, who had immigrated from Russia aged two, worked occasionally as a saleswoman."), so the above phrasing makes even less sense. Nakonana (talk) 16:08, 8 December 2025 (UTC)
I wrote this article in like a day with no one else checking it and I have a tendency to produce rather tortured prose. Sources do refer to his mother as a child of immigrants, despite her also being one, for some reason. I have changed it, it is hopefully less bad now. PARAKANYAA (talk) 03:13, 9 December 2025 (UTC)
Looks good. Thanks :) Nakonana (talk) 16:58, 9 December 2025 (UTC)

Nominator: PARAKANYAA (talk · contribs) 01:40, 1 April 2026 (UTC)

GA review

This review is transcluded from Talk:One More Victim/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Coffeeandcrumbs (talk · contribs) 19:48, 1 April 2026 (UTC)


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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1. prose

  • "seeming contradiction" – I think you mean "apparent contradiction"
    • done
  • "Neo-Nazi serial killer Frank Spisak, who murdered three people in racially motivated attacks in the 1980s, read the book and found Burros relatable."
    • there was a reason i included this but as it is now it is a non-sequitur, removed
  • The section title "Research" does not adequately cover the content of the section. Suggest "Research and writing style"
    • changed that
  • I would move the clause that includes Frankel's criticism "for not satisfactorily answering the question of why Burros ended up how he did" to the appropriate subsection on the topic or remove it as superfluous
    • removed as superfluous

2. references

  • although you are not required to have citations for everything in the "Contents" section, in the case of a book, it would be easy and not harmful to include citations to page numbers in the primary source. that would prevent future modifications not attributable to the contents of the book
    • Well, in this case, a lot of the uncited sentences are summaries of 20-30 page ranges, so I don't think that would help. This is a fairly abbreviated summary (since we already have a full article on Burros).
  • there is no full citation for the book itself. you sometimes make refs to "Rosenthal & Gelb 1968" but the full citation for the book should appear on first citation, no?
    • I felt like it was implicitly to the book given the article subject, but fair enough, added full ref.

6. pics

  • caption says "alongside other members" but the others in the photo are not visible. either change the caption or expand the crop to show the other people
    • done
  • in the paper back, a photo similar, but not the same, as this one is what appears on the cover
    • Yeah. I am not sure if that one is copyrighted or not. I've never seen that image anywhere except the cover of the paperback edition.

Great work! These are all minor complaints that you can dispose of easily. --- C&C (Coffeeandcrumbs) 19:48, 1 April 2026 (UTC)

  • @Coffeeandcrumbs I believe I've dealt with or addressed everything you mentioned. PARAKANYAA (talk) 22:31, 1 April 2026 (UTC)
    • Good to go. Please leave a note on my talk page if you nominate for FA. --- C&C (Coffeeandcrumbs) 03:13, 2 April 2026 (UTC)

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