Talk:Port Arthur Refinery
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There appear to be three refineries in Port Arthur operated by different companies, so this article should be split. According to http://www.eia.doe.gov/neic/rankings/refineries.htm the companies are Motiva (the one this page currently describes), Premcor (now owned by Valero), and Total. I'd suggest the page titles Port Arthur Refinery (Motiva), Port Arthur Refinery (Valero), and Port Arthur Refinery (Total). —Mulad (talk) 20:00, 14 May 2007 (UTC)
- Good idea. As a start, this article should be renamed as suggested above: Port Arthur Refinery (Motiva). Plazak (talk) 19:20, 29 July 2015 (UTC)
YungHam (talk) 08:08, 6 March 2017 (UTC)
Hey this is Hamza Khawaja from your ESPM class, and I'm reviewing your article.
The following are improvements that I think you can make on your article:
- Subsequent to the 6th paragraph, I recommend having more citations because you're explaining the details of the expansion of the Port, and heavily putting it in quantitative terms. You bring about many numbers, but without citations.
- You only have 1 source citation in your entire document. For the amount you have written, you need at least around 4-5 from what I've seen. However, if it is all one source that you've pulled the entire article's evidence from, then make that clear somewhere.....or at least cite that source "[1]" multiple times after the sentences.
- Word Error: Make sure you add a link to many words that have explanations, or words that are most probably going to be foreign to your audience. For example, in the 5th paragraph, the word "debottlenecking" should be linked to this page(https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/debottleneck#English) to give a better idea of what it means, and the same should be done for similar words.
- Title Error: I very strongly suggest you have subtopics in your article because, if you keep your article the same as now, your multitude of paragraphs will be a "quick summary" of the concept. My suggestion is that you should have a subtopic of "Expansion", and "Refinery Diet". These would make your article well-structured, and a lot easier to conceptually understand.
- Tone: The tone of this article is actually very neutral. It's impressive how you concisely communicate your ideas to the audience without any bias.
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I am impressed with your clarity and how this is written. I think part of the article is clear and you explain the development of the refinery. Yet, I think there is more here. I didn’t notice an explanation of how the port Arthur has been the recipient of hazardous spills or what is going on there in regards to environmental justice? I think the most important thing you could do to improve the article is add more sources that would make it less bias and present other view points as well. Wiki$ (talk) 06:39, 10 March 2017 (UTC)
There should not be an "anti-industry" section. This should be renamed "anti-pollution" or "Anti-regulation/Pro-regulation" The complaints outlined by the sources for this section critique pollution, lack of sufficient regulation, and heavy industrial petroleum refining, but do not advocate against "industry". Would these opponents also oppose a manufacturing of renewable energy infrastructure, done in an environmentally sustainable way? The use of the term "anti-industry" is politically charged, and smacks of bias. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 12.31.71.58 (talk) 19:17, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
Feedback - GSI
Nice addition to the Port Arthur Refinery page. I think it would be interesting to add a couple sentences comparing this refinery to other refineries, domestically and internationally. Also, think about outlining these additions at the end of the lead.GAA8423 (talk) 20:00, 8 April 2017 (UTC)