Hi there! As my message above mentions I've been working on improving this page on behalf of Ramtha's School of Enlightenment. I've finished writing this and have used my user page as a place to share what I've written. You can see this new version here: User:Calstarry.
I have some notes to share about what I've done here to help guide anyone who reviews my version and wants to compare it to what is currently on the page. I'm going to put my notes below, and sorry they're a little long, I'm just trying to be thorough. If anything isn't clear or you have any questions please leave me a message.
A few general comments:
- I've added the schools infobox to this page and a short "About the school" section because I noticed that there wasn't any sort of simple overview of the school and Ramtha.
- I've looked over all of the current articles used to support information in the entry and have kept what I was able to. I have removed the ones that were primary sources, dead links, ersonal websites that are not reliable for use on Wikipedia or not really about the school, for instance the reviews of the movie What the Bleep Do We Know!? If you are wondering about any specific sources let me know and I can be more specific.
"Introduction":
- I've taken out the part about it being described as "cult-like" because I feel that the opinion of a certain group of people is not important in a top-level summary of the school.
"History" section:
- I've updated this section with information about a lawsuit from 2012-2013 that is not mentioned on the page right now.
"Teachings" section:
- Right now this section includes some criticisms of the school and gets into the debate over whether the school is a cult or not. I've taken this out because this is what the "Criticism" section is for.
- The information about Melton's research has been moved to the "Research" section. Again, there is no need to repeat this information in both sections.
- This section uses some phrases that very clearly push a particular point of view (for example: "Other skills allegedly obtained ... which have been criticized by various skeptics around the world.") I've tried to write this section in a neutral voice sticking closely to what the available articles say.
"Research" section:
- I renamed this section "Research into Ramtha" because I thought that "Research" alone wasn't entirely clear.
- I've taken out some unsupported information and information that doesn't inform the reader. For example, in the final paragraph of this section the information about Krippner's study doesn't add anything to the reader's understanding of Ramtha and I cannot find the paper to support this information and get a better understanding of what this means.
- Also, the part about Knight's motives for sponsoring the conferences cannot be verified in any of the articles I've found and I wasn't able to find the reference currently used. Based on the sources I've found, Melton was the one who brought the idea of the research project to Knight so this information doesn't seem necessary.
"Criticism" section:
- I've also renamed this part of the page "Criticism of the school" to be more specific.
- The anecdotes and criticism from Glenn Cunningham have not been covered in independent news publications, and I cannot locate the original videos. I feel they should not be included here because they are self-published claims of one individual.
- The criticism of Melton's book in this section is not supported by a reference and is out of place. If this can be supported his article would be a better place for this kind of criticism.
- I've taken out the names of the former students, but have kept their allegations and criticism in this section.
- I've taken out the criticism from Michael Shermer because the only reference to support this is his own book. Since this information cannot be found in news articles too, it doesn't seem to be noteworthy criticism.
"Related projects" section:
- Describing the film as controversial and including criticism here is inappropriate. There is an article on this film and the critical response should be covered there. I've kept the focus here on how this film relates to the school.
"See also" section:
- My revision links to the New Religious Movement page so including this link here isn't necessary. I've taken it out of my version.
- The other links seem to have been added by people who oppose to the school. This doesn't really seem like an appropriate use of the section to me, but for now I have left them as is. I suggest taking them out, but I'd like to know what other people think.
"External links" section:
- My revision includes links to the school's website, their TV website and JZ Knight's official website. I've taken out the link to the EnlightenMeFree website because linking to an article about a group opposed to the school doesn't seem appropriate. I've also taken out the "UK Co-ordination website" link because the web page does not exist.
- Just today a link was added to the school's 2014 world tour events, I have not included this because it seems too specific and will become dated within a year.
Again, if you are unsure about any changes between my version and the current page that I haven't explained please leave me a message and I'll answer as quickly as I can.
I am looking for a thoughtful review of my version and any feedback that I can use to improve what I've written if you have concerns. Though I have written this on behalf of the school, I am not personally a member, and have done my best to write this article so that it is neutral, accurate according to the available sources, and meets Wikipedia's standards. I'm happy to work through any issues in any way possible. However, as I also mentioned in my first message above, because of my "conflict of interest" I will not edit the entry myself. If what I have written is an improvement I hope that other editors will be able to make the changes to the entry for me. Calstarry (talk) 17:01, 2 October 2013 (UTC)
- Calstarry, I would like to thank you for announcing your conflict of interest and taking the appropriate steps of suggesting your edits on the talk page instead of doing them yourself. I took a cursory look at your suggested edits and see that your knowledge of Wikipedia editing policies is impressively in depth for an account that has only made a 8 saved edits. I ask in good faith, is there another account you used to edit Wikipedia?--Dkriegls (talk to me!) 06:08, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi there! I totally understand why you've asked. I do realize that this is not how most editors start out on Wikipedia.
- To answer your question, I've made a few typo fixes on Wikipedia in the past, but I don't have another Wikipedia account I actively use. I've set up this account to just to work with editors on this one Wikipedia page and I'd rather not link it to my other account for privacy reasons.
- I have been receiving help from a more experienced editor as I've been working on this, though. They've been helping me learn about Wikipedia guidelines and formatting and have reviewed my draft and are giving me tips on how to make requests. The research and the writing is all my own work though. Is there anything else I can answer for you? Calstarry (talk) 21:52, 4 October 2013 (UTC)
- Cheers, just asking. Looks like JC is gonna take a stab at it for you. Dkriegls (talk to me!) 06:09, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
- Give me a few days to check the article above over against some of the reference sources I can find and I will get back with you. But don't expect anything until Thursday at the earliest, because I'm busy at work till then. John Carter (talk) 17:12, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
- J. Gordon Melton's Encyclopedia of American Religions has a fairly long entry on this subject, and would likely be a good reference to flesh out some sections. • Astynax talk 07:50, 18 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi there Astynax! Do you know where I could find this article? I can't seem to find it online. John Carter mentioned to me the entry about Ramtha by Melton in the Encyclopedia of Cults, Sects, and New Religions. I just found a version online at Amazon that I can read so I'm going to look this over today and see if I can add anything to my draft. Do you know if the entry you mentioned and the entry he mentioned are the same thing? Also, was there something specific you thought needed to be fleshed out? Anything else jump out at you about what I've put together? Calstarry (talk) 14:48, 18 October 2013 (UTC)
- I believe the article that John Carter mentioned would be the same. Articles in Melton and similar encyclopedic references are useful for showing the range of topics that should likely be covered in articles here. They also provide backup for some weakly sourced citations. A more in-depth academic source may be found in Gail M. Harley, 2004. "From Atlantis to America: JZ Knight Encounters Ramtha" in James R. Lewis and Jesper Aagaard Petersen, eds., Controversial New Religions. New York: Oxford University Press, pp. 319–328 ISBN 0-19-515683-8. • Astynax talk 19:04, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
- I've done a quick once-over, and my first reaction is that this article treats Ramtha as if he is real. We don't treat any religion's as if they are making factual claims.—Kww(talk) 20:34, 11 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi there Kww! What parts of the article do you think treat Ramtha as if he were real? Do you have a suggestion about how to change this? Maybe there is a different phrase to use or something?
- I've tried to treat this topic neutrally, because some people do believe that Ramtha is real. I'm worried that writing this in a way that implies Ramtha is not real would be inserting a point of view into this page. Do you know how this is handled on other pages like this? Calstarry (talk) 17:54, 15 October 2013 (UTC)
- One thing I'd do is take out the "cult-like" from the intro and put in what are the real substantial criticisms. For one thing the word "cult" means different things to different people. To the Christian anti-cult movement it means "any religion that came into being after AD 33." To the secular anti-cult movement it means "a group in which group members are abused by group leaders." To the governments of China, the USSR, and now Russia it means "a group that might challenge our authority." -Borock (talk) 18:42, 18 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi Borock. Thanks for joining the discussion. I agree with you. Cult is a very broad negative term and part of what I'd like to do here is to clarify who has said the school is a cult. If you look at my revised version on my user page you'll see that I took the cultlike part out of the introduction but have discussed who has called the school a cult in the "Criticism of the school" section. As I've said in my reply above to Astynax I'm going to review the Ramtha entry by Melton in the Encyclopedia of Cults, Sects, and New Religions this weekend and see what I can maybe add in, but I'd love to hear what other thoughts you have about the draft. Calstarry (talk) 19:35, 18 October 2013 (UTC)
- Have we considered merging this article and J. Z. Knight? Of course both are notable, but they are so related that you can't talk about one without the other. So a lot of material ends up being duplicated. Borock (talk) 13:48, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
- You raise the big question in my eyes there, at least in passing. On a topic such as this, relating to channeling, I regret to say that we don't have real clear existing guidelines regarding what content goes where, and without a better idea of what content is most applicable to which article we get lots of duplication.
- FWIW, as a basic proposal, I tend to think that for most religious groups of any sort the three big topics tend to be the founder, his or her teachings, and the church or community that follows them. Based on that idea, I might myself support the creation of an additional article, Ramtha, and break up the content of those three articles (not including potentially separate articles on individual books, tapes, or whatever) more or less as follows:
- J. Z. Knight would include the biographical details of that person, including material regarding life history and the material about the earlier Dialogues beyond the content of Ramtha's teachings, as well as probably material on the other entities Knight has been said to channel.
- Ramtha would include the purported biography of that entity, and the bulk of the teachings attributed to that entity, particularly prior to the founding of the school.
- Ramtha's School of Enlightenment would focus on the teachings from Ramtha since the time of the foundation of the school, the various meetings taking place there, the activities of such meetings, the members of the school, and suchlike.
- Short summary sections of the material included at length in other articles might be included as per WP:SS as indicated. John Carter (talk) 15:11, 20 October 2013 (UTC)
- A few other points. I think a clearer description of the physical campus of the school might be called for. Also, I have recently e-mailed myself a rather large number of articles from newspapers and magazines which I found on databanks, and copied out a few articles I have found in reference books. I would be more than happy to e-mail all of them to any individual who requested such. Probably the best way to do that would be to drop me an e-mail by going to my user page and hitting the "e-mail this user" line in the toolbox, generally on the far left of the screen. If for whatever reason someone didn't want me to have their regular e-mail, I myself have created more than a few one-time-use e-mail accounts for similar purposes, and I do think it might be useful for anyone interested in developing the content on this topic to have as much information available as possible. John Carter (talk) 15:24, 20 October 2013 (UTC)
- Comment: A lot of these proposals seem good at first look, and applaud User:Calstarry for going about this in the proper way. I haven't done a more in-depth comparison yet, so let me get back to you in a bit for that. Also, does anybody know how to get a full-text version of this article? ~Adjwilley (talk) 17:27, 21 October 2013 (UTC)
- I've sent some links and text by email. I believe the Time article requires an individual subscription (couldn't get it through my library). • Astynax talk 22:11, 21 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi! As I mentioned to a couple of you, I've read the essay by Melton in the Encyclopedia of Cults, Sects, and New Religions and I've made some changes and added some new information to the draft in my user space. The updated draft is here: Ramtha's School draft
- Towards the end of the essay there was a paragraph about Knight's investments in Arabian horses in the 1980s. Some students of the school invested with Knight, lost their money and were later refunded by Knight. What does everyone think? Is this the type of thing that would go in the article about the school or the article about Knight? For now I haven't added this information to my draft. Calstarry (talk) 00:53, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi everyone. I forgot to mention yesterday that I do have a subscription to Time magazine, but I'm unsure what the copyright rules are since this article has limited access. Are there any portions of the article that I can share or answer questions about? I assume I cannot share the whole article.
- Also, I didn't yet respond to John Carter's suggestion that there should be three separate pages. I can see how this could be a good solution, though I'm not really sure if there is enough information about Ramtha to make it its own article. My new draft for this article (here: Ramtha's School draft) has focused only on information about the school and information about Ramtha. I saw that there was a very long page about JZ Knight, so I didn't include information about her background and personal life in my version, unless it directly connected to the history or events surrounding the school.
- I haven't read the whole page on JZ Knight too closely, but my first thought is that it is probably longer than it should be. For instance, I see that her page has a pretty long section about the teachings of Ramtha when it seems to me that the teachings are more related to the school than to her.
- These are all probably issues that we can work out later. For now I'm wondering if anyone has had a chance to read over the draft I put together and compare it to the current article. Maybe we could use this as a starting off point for revising JZ Knight's page and maybe creating a separate page for Ramtha. Here is the link to my draft again: Ramtha's School draft
- Also, this discussion has gotten really long, so I wanted to repeat this incase someone new joining hasn't read the whole conversation. I am not personally a member of Ramtha's School of Enlightenment, but I am working for the school as a representative to share this draft I've written and talk to other editors about improving this page. Calstarry (talk) 22:01, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi, I was wondering if anyone had any other thoughts or big issues about this article that they wanted to bring up. Has anyone had a chance to read over what I put together and compare it to what is on the page now?
- I don't want to rush anyone along here because I'm sure you all have lots of other things you're working on, but I do want to try and keep the conversation moving. Please share any thoughts or feedback you have on my draft when you're able. Calstarry (talk) 18:15, 29 October 2013 (UTC)
Steps forward
This discussion has gotten fairly long so I wanted to summarize what has happened so far so that any new editors who join this discussion aren't so overwhelmed.
- I came to this page with a new draft of this page for other editors to review. Here is that draft: Ramtha's School draft. Up above you'll find my detailed notes comparing my draft and the current page. I'm also happy to answer any questions about what I have written.
- Several editors expressed concern that my draft treated Ramtha as if he were a real person. I made a few changes to my draft in response to these comments. Here are those changes.
- Several other editors suggested I read an essay on Ramtha, Knight and the school written by J. Gordon Melton who has studied the school closely. I found this essay and made more changes to my draft. Here are those changes.
- Lastly several editors began to discuss the possibility of dividing up this subject into three articles. One on Ramtha, one on the school and one on the school's founder JZ Knight. (There currently is no article on Ramtha individually, which is why my draft includes a new section on him.)
It was after this that the conversation died down. I really would like to get this conversation moving again because it seems that other editors agree that this page is not in very good shape and could use some work. As I explained above, I am somewhat limited in what I can do here because of my conflict of interest. I am not a member of the school, but have been hired by the school to address this article on their behalf.
Here is what I'm hoping can happen next so we can continue to move forward:
- If any editors have time to read my draft and provide me with any notes on its content that would be really helpful. I'm more than willing to continue to make changes to my draft so that everyone involved in the discussion is satisfied that it is thorough and neutral. We've discussed and I've addressed some general issues (treating Ramtha as if he were real, adding the Melton source) but so far I haven't been able to get a good sense of what people think about my draft in comparison to the current version.
- If you don't have time to read this draft, but know someone who is knowledgeable about new religious movements or has worked on similar articles, let me know and I can reach out to them about joining our discussion.
Thank you. Calstarry (talk) 17:32, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
- Comment: Although I see nothing objectionable per se, I do think the sourcing should eventually be upgraded. Although newspaper reports are fine for noting events, academic works which pull together various threads to form a more complete and authoritative picture will (and should) eventually be added and/or substituted as citations. Although I regard your "Criticisms of the school" section edits to be an improvement, I would prefer that the section be moved into a sub-section under "Teachings", and called something other than "Criticisms" or "Controversies" (such separate sections carry a PoV implication that outside observations are legitimate/illegitimate attacks). That said, I see no reason that your proposed changes should not be implemented. Others editors will make further contributions over time, especially as supported by new and more solid references. • Astynax talk 19:14, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
- Hi Astynax! I understand how you feel about the "Criticisms of the school" section. I'm also concerned that a section with the word "Criticism" in it will just be used as a dumping ground for negative information or complaints about the school. You can already see how full paragraphs were added to the current page's Criticism section using sources that are not reliable.
- Still, I had kept this as a section because I was trying to stick closely to the order of information on the current page. I did change the name to match the instructions on the Wikipedia:Criticism page though, specifically this information here. (Even though the school does not consider itself a religion it is often treated as if it is one, so the section title seemed appropriate to me.)
- I'm open to your suggestion about making the Criticism section a subsection of the "Teachings" section. Do you think "Skepticism of teachings" would be a better name for this subsection? Other than that I don't really have any idea what else to call it.
- I also thought that it might make more sense to break apart the "Criticisms of the school" section and move the information into other parts of the article where it fits, which seems to be encouraged by the Wikipedia:Criticism page. For example, most of the information in my draft's Criticism section is about statements made by former students. Perhaps this information should go into the Students section.
- Let me know what you think of these ideas. I'm happy to take a stab at reorganizing the information, or I can move and rename the whole Criticism section if you think that is best.
- Oh, I also saw the two edits you made to my draft. Thanks! They both look great. Calstarry (talk) 19:38, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
- I don't want to sidetrack from the message above, so if anyone has any thoughts on that please add them, but I just wanted to mention that Adjwilley updated the introduction. Any feedback on the other parts of my draft would be helpful though. Calstarry (talk) 17:24, 8 November 2013 (UTC)