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Edit Request

This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest was declined. Per: WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.

I am an employee of this organization and have listed a COI on my user page. We are requesting edits to update recent activities and general changes. As I have not edited a Wikipedia article before and am learning to navigate doing so with a COI, I have begun with the most basic changes we are requesting and will request additional, slightly more substantial changes once I have practiced with these.

More information Extended content ...

Extended content

1. Request removal of the "." in the page name so that it reads "RepresentUs" to reflect a change in branding.

2. Replace "to pass tough anti-corruption laws in cities and states across America, and end the legalized corruption that has come to define modern politics." with "bring together conservatives, progressives, and everyone in between to pass powerful anti-corruption laws that stop political bribery, end secret money, and fix our broken elections." to reflect the updated language on our "About" page ^[1]

3. Under "Strategy," I'm requesting the addition of Twitter and Instagram to our list of social media platforms that we use to bring attention to our public education campaigns so that the sentence "The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook, YouTube, and Reddit to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns" instead reads "The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook, YouTube, Twitter, Instagram, and Reddit to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns."

4. Under "Organizational Structure: Chapters" I'm requesting to update the number of chapters to "more than 100" and the deletion of "including chapters in Tallahassee, Florida; Rockford, Illinois; Roanoke Valley; and New Orleans" so that the sentence "RepresentUs has more than 40 local chapters across the United States, including chapters in Tallahassee, Florida; Rockford, Illinois; Roanoke Valley; and New Orleans." instead reads: "RepresentUs has more than 100 local chapters across the United States." ^[2]

5. Under "Organizational Structure: Funding" I'm requesting to remove the sentence "The organization provides a list of funders upon request." and replace it with "The organization lists funders on its website." We have since made our funders list available without having to request it and would like the page to reflect that. ^[3]

6. Finally, I'm requesting that a section be added to reflect another major function of the organization as follows:

Unrig Summit (Section title)

Unrig Summit is a nonpartisan gathering with the stated goal of finding solutions to political dysfunction in American government.^[4] Speakers include grassroots activists, current and former lawmakers, and advocates for government reform. The first Unrig Summit was held in New Orleans Louisiana in 2018.^[5] The second was held in Nashville Tennessee in 2019.^[6]

I welcome feedback regarding anything I've submitted and appreciate the time taken to update the page as well as your patience with an inexperienced contributor.

References

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Meara at RepresentUs (talk) 20:46, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

Reply 26-APR-2019

Edit request declined

Portions of text in the edit request proposal were found to be insufficiently paraphrased from the source material. Text which is to be added to an article ought to be written in an editor's own words and phrasing.

Regards, Spintendo 22:18, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi there, would it be possible for you to indicate which edits were insufficiently paraphrased? The only sources came from, 1. the about page, which was copied exactly as I am intending to quote it directly (if there is additional attribution needed for this please let me know), 2. the chapter page, which simply is there to validate that there are over 100 chapters and does not paraphrase anything on the page, 3. the donor list page, which again is there only to validate that the page exists and show that the intended edit is true, and does not paraphrase anything, 4. the Unrig Summit website, which describes the summit that, in my edit, is meant to paraphrase where on the website the summit is described as "Unrig Summit is the premier right-left summit to solve America’s political crisis. It’s the brightest minds from the right and left working together to unrig our broken system." Is the edit I proposed an incorrect paraphrasing of that? That sentence actually comes from the FAQ page^[1]; does that need to be cited instead? The last two citations are only to show that the conference took place and to validate where and when it did so, and do not paraphrase anything.

I would very much appreciate help in understanding where this disagrees with Wikipedia's policies on close paraphrasing, as I've read the page you referenced and still do not understand where the proposed edits went wrong. I would love to be able to make the appropriate changes and resubmit the edits so that they conform to the policies. Meara at RepresentUs (talk) 16:19, 30 April 2019 (UTC)

Edit Request

I have attempted to make slight changes to the proposed copy so as not to violate the close paraphrasing practices of Wikipedia. If there are still issues, some explanation of where the issues lie would be much appreciated.

1. Request removal of the "." in the page name so that it reads "RepresentUs" to reflect a change in branding.

2. Replace "whose stated mission is "to pass tough anti-corruption laws in cities and states across America, and end the legalized corruption that has come to define modern politics." with "whose stated mission on the website is to "bring together conservatives, progressives, and everyone in between to pass powerful anti-corruption laws that stop political bribery, end secret money, and fix our broken elections." to reflect the updated language on our "About" page ^[2]

3. Under "Strategy," I'm requesting the addition of Twitter and Instagram to our list of social media platforms that we use to bring attention to our public education campaigns so that the sentence "The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook, YouTube, and Reddit to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns" instead reads "The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook, YouTube, Twitter, Instagram, and Reddit to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns."

4. Under "Organizational Structure: Chapters" I'm requesting to update the number of chapters to "more than 100" and the deletion of "including chapters in Tallahassee, Florida; Rockford, Illinois; Roanoke Valley; and New Orleans" so that the sentence "RepresentUs has more than 40 local chapters across the United States, including chapters in Tallahassee, Florida; Rockford, Illinois; Roanoke Valley; and New Orleans." instead reads: "RepresentUs has more than 100 local chapters across the United States." ^[3]

5. Under "Organizational Structure: Funding" I'm requesting to remove the sentence "The organization provides a list of funders upon request." and replace it with "The organization lists funders on its website." We have since made our funders list available without having to request it and would like the page to reflect that. ^[4]

6. Finally, I'm requesting that a section be added to reflect another major function of the organization as follows:

Unrig Summit (Section title)

Unrig Summit is a nonpartisan gathering with the stated goal of finding solutions to political dysfunction in American government.^[5] Speakers include grassroots activists, current and former lawmakers, and advocates for government reform. The first Unrig Summit was held in New Orleans Louisiana in 2018.^[6] The second was held in Nashville Tennessee in 2019. ^[7]

Thank you for your time and effort in updating this page! Meara at RepresentUs (talk) 20:07, 9 May 2019 (UTC)

References

Hi, Meara at RepresentUs. I've moved the page to remove the period, added a section on the summit, and changed the sentence about the donor list. Regarding #2, this is a lengthy worded mission statement. Not every organization has their quoted mission/values/etc. on their corresponding Wikipedia article. Either way, a quote like that isn't appropriate for the first sentence of the lead section. If you prefer a succinct mission statement other than "advocates for state and local laws based on model legislation called the American Anti-Corruption Act", please provide a reliable source with relevant text. (Please read about Wikipedia's policy regarding primary, secondary, and tertiary sources at WP:PSTS.)

While on the topic of sources, I did not complete #3 because that sentence already doesn't seem to have a source attributed to it. #4 isn't an unreasonable request, but the number 100 is not specifically stated on that page of the website. The more an article relies on primary sources (in this case, RepresentUs' official website and opinion/guest pieces written by Josh Silver) the less credible the article is in regards to Wikipedia's three very important core content policies. Something quick from the "about page" and your use of the donor list page are appropriate uses of the primary source, but stats on how effective or widespread the organization's programs are is more of a stretch, and a secondary source like a news article's paraphrasing of the organization's achievements is preferred. List-heavy sections in this article—like RepresentUs#Other city and state Anti-Corruption Acts and Resolutions—don't all seem relevant to RepresentUs, which is the subject of this article. From my couple quick spot checks in that one section, the use of the sources is questionable... even tying said events to the American Anti-Corruption Act, let alone its relevance to RepresentUs' Wikipedia article. Rhinopias (talk) 02:32, 10 May 2019 (UTC)

Edit Request

Part of an edit requested by an editor with a conflict of interest has been implemented. See the reply section below for additional information.

(I am an employee of this organization and have listed a COI on my user page.)

Requested change(s):
1. Add a sub-section titled "2018 election" between RepresentUs#2016 election and RepresentUs#Other city and state Anti-Corruption Acts and Resolutions, mirroring the existing formatting of the "2016..." section:

More information Extended content ...

Extended content

2018 Election

RepresentUs members and partners supported more than 20 successful anti-corruption campaigns in 2018:^[1]

State

Colorado Amendments Y&Z — Two Anti-Gerrymandering reform initiatives that create a 12-member independent commission for congressional districts in the case of Amendment Y, and for state legislative districts with Amendment Z.^[2]
Michigan Proposal 2 — An anti-gerrymandering reform initiative spearheaded by activist Katie Fahey beginning in 2016. Proposal 2 creates an impartial citizen commission for both congressional and state legislative districts. ^[3]
Missouri Amendment 1 — Also known as the "Clean Missouri" amendment, Missouri Amendment 1 is an anti-gerrymandering reform initiative that creates a nonpartisan position called "The State Demographer" to draw state legislative district lines on the basis of partisan fairness and competitiveness. ^[4]
Ohio Issue 1 — An anti-gerrymandering initiative that forces bipartisan agreement on the drawing of congressional district lines, as well as increasing transparency and partisan fairness within the district drawing process. ^[5]
Utah Proposition 4 — A ballot measure that creates a 7-member independent redistricting commission to draft maps for both congressional and state legislative districts. Proposition 4 increases transparency by requiring communication, inclusion, and the releasing of draft plans to the public. Additionally, the ballot measure grants voters the ability to sue in order to block plans that do not adhere to the specific requirements of Proposition 4.^[6]
Nevada Question 5 — A state-wide, voter-approved Automatic Voter Registration ballot initiative that registers eligible citizens to vote when applying to issue or renew any type of driver's license or identification card from the Nevada Department of Motor Vehicles. Additionally, voter registration will automatically be updated for previously registered voters during a change of address. Eligible citizens can also choose to opt-out of voter registration. ^[7]
Maryland SB 1048 — A senate bill that allows eligible Maryland residents automatic voter registration whenever they interact with state agencies such as the Motor Vehicle Administration or the Maryland Health Benefit Exchange.^[8]^[9]
Massachusetts HB 4834 — A house bill that provides automatic voter registration for eligible citizens whenever conducting transactions through the Massachusetts' Registry of Motor Vehicles or Medicaid program. The passage of HB 4834 makes Massachusetts the 14th state to enact automatic voter registration.^[10]^[11]
New Jersey A2014 — An assembly bill that enacts automatic voter registration for eligible citizens when issuing or renewing driver's licenses or identification cards at the state's Division of Motor Vehicles. Additionally, the bill opens the door for other state agencies that handle similar voter information to put automatic voter registration systems into place.^[12]^[13]
Washington HB 2595 — A house bill containing multiple measures aimed at increasing voter participation. Most notably, the implementation of automatic voter registration for eligible citizens who are issuing or renewing a driver's license or identification card.^[14]
Massachusetts Question 2 — A ballot initiative that created a 15-member citizens commission to study the effects of Citizens United, specifically regarding corporate personhood in relation to their inalienable constitutional rights and their effect on political spending.^[15]
North Dakota Measure 1 — A sweeping Anti-Corruption ballot initiative that creates a 5-member ethics commission, tightens campaign finance laws, restricts lobbyist-to-politician gifts and conflicts of interest, and increases campaign finance transparency.^[16]
Maine Question 1 — A people's veto referendum that protected Ranked Choice Voting through overturning sections of Legislative Document 1646, which sought to repeal and delay the implementation of ranked choice voting, as put forth by 2016 referendum Maine Question 5 on the basis of constitutional conflicts.^[17]^[18]
Alaska HB 44 — A anti-corruption house bill that targets and restricts lobbyist gifts and legislator conflicts of interest.^[19]^[20]
New Mexico Amendment 2 — A ballot measure that creates an independent, 7-member Ethics Commission to investigate and hold public officials, lobbyists, candidates, and government contractors accountable on issues of alleged ethics violations.^[21]

Municipal

Defended against Memphis Referendum Ordinance No. 5669 and Referendum Ordinance No. 5677 — A proposed repeal of Instant-runoff voting in Memphis.^[22]^[23]
Denver, Colorado Question 2E — A ballot measure that lowers overall campaign contribution limits and creates a public financing program for qualifying candidates.^[24]
Phoenix, AZ Proposition 419 — A dark money municipal ballot measure that requires organizations and individuals to publicly disclose and identify large money donations over $1,000 that seek to influence a city election. The donation disclosure extends to identifying both original and intermediate sources of campaign donations. ^[25]
Tempe, AZ Proposition 403 — A ballot measure that requires external organizations to disclose sources of campaign funding, specifically aimed at removing dark money influencers of Tempe elections^[26]
Baltimore, Maryland Question H (Council Bill 18-0229) — A Baltimore City charter amendment that creates a public financing option for qualifying political candidates through a "Fair Election Fund", as well as creating a 11-member "Fair Election Fund Commission" that oversees and administers the fund.^[27]
New York City Proposal 1 — A Campaign Finance reform city charter amendment that lowers the limit a political candidate can receive from a contributor. Additionally, the ballot measure also increases the availability and attainability of public financing for qualifying candidates.^[28]

Kevin at RepresentUs (talk) 18:04, 17 June 2019 (UTC)

References

[1]
"2018 Election Results". RepresentUs. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[2]
Colorado Public Radio Staff (2018-11-06). "Colorado Amendments Y & Z, Independent Panels For Redistricting, Have Passed". Colorado Public Radio. Colorado. Retrieved 2019-06-12.
[3]
Egan, Paul (2018-11-06). "Michigan voters approve anti-gerrymandering Proposal 2". Detroit Free Press. Detroit, Michigan. Retrieved 2019-06-12.
[4]
Reynolds, David; Oide, Thomas; Weinberg, Tessa (2018-11-06). "AMENDMENT 1: Voters strongly support Clean Missouri redistricting plan, ethics reform". The Columbia Missourian. Columbia, Missouri. Retrieved 2019-06-12.
[5]
Wilson, Reid (2018-05-05). "Ohio voters pass redistricting reform initiative". The Hill. Washington, D.C. Retrieved 2019-06-12.
[6]
Roche, Lisa Riley (2018-11-20). "Utah proposition to battle gerrymandering passes as final votes tallied". Deseret News. Salt Lake City, Utah. Retrieved 2019-06-12.
[7]
Folley, Aris (2018-11-07). "Nevada voters approve automatic voter registration". The Hill. Washington, D.C. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[8]
Wiggins, Ovetta (2018-04-06). "Maryland bill that allows automatic voter registration becomes law without Gov. Hogan's signature". The Washington Post. Washington, D.C. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[9]
Hogan Jr., Lawrence J. "Bill Text: MD SB1048 | 2018 | Regular Session | Chaptered". LegiScan. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[10]
Glatter, Hayley (2018-06-28). "Massachusetts House of Representatives Passes Automatic Voter Registration Bill". Boston Magazine. Boston, Massachusetts. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[11]
"2018 Massachusetts legislative session". Ballotpedia. sec. August 9, 2018. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[12]
Anapol, Avery (2018-05-17). "New Jersey governor signs automatic voter registration bill". The Hill. Washington, D.C. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[13]
"Bill Text: NJ A2014 | 2018-2019 | Regular Session | Chaptered". LegiScan. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[14]
Wilson, Reid (2018-03-20). "Wash. gov signs universal voter registration law". The Hill. Washington, D.C. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[15]
Creamer, Lisa (2018-11-06). "Mass. Voters Pass Question 2, Express Support Of Long Shot Mission To Repeal Citizens United". WBUR News. Boston, Massachusetts. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[16]
Tran, Tu-Uyen (2018-11-06). "Aimed at combating corruption, North Dakota voters pass Measure 1". The Dickinson Press. Dickinson, North Dakota. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[17]
"Maine LD 1646 (2017)". Ballotpedia. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[18]
Conley, Julia (2018-06-13). "In 'Historic Victory', Maine Voters Demand Ranked-Choice Voting in Statewide Elections...Again". Common Dreams. Portland, Maine. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[19]
"Enrolled HB 44". The Alaska State Legislature. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[20]
Griffiths, Shawn M. (2018-07-23). "Conservatives, Progressives Unite Against Powerful Interests to Pass Anti-Corruption Law". The Independent Voter Network. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[21]
The New Mexican (2018-11-06). "New Mexico overwhelmingly backs ethics commission". The Santa Fe New Mexican. Santa Fe, New Mexico. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[22]
"Memphis, Tennessee, Referendum Ordinance No. 5669, Eliminate Run-Off Elections (November 2018)". Ballotpedia. Retrieved 2019-06-14.
[23]
Munks, Jamie (2018-11-06). "Memphis voters shoot down longer City Council terms, instant runoff voting repeal". Memphis Commercial Appeal. Memphis, Tennessee. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[24]
Sachs, David (2018-11-06). "Measure 2E supporters say their victory is chipping away at Citizens United and the power of money in politics". Denverite. Denver, Colorado. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[25]
MacDonald-Evoy, Jerod (2018-11-09). "What happens now that Phoenix passed an anti-dark-money measure?". The Arizona Mirror. Phoenix, Arizona. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[26]
MacDonald-Evoy, Jerod (2018-03-14). "Landslide vote to curb Tempe 'dark money' may send broader message to Arizona". The Republic | azcentral.com. Phoenix, Arizona. Retrieved 2019-06-17.
[27]
Scarr, Emily (2018-11-07). "FAIR ELECTION FUND CHARTER AMENDMENT PASSES". Maryland PIRG. Baltimore, Maryland. Retrieved 2019-06-13.
[28]
Moore, David (2018-11-05). "NYC Progressives Coalesce Around Campaign Finance Ballot Initiative". Sludge. Retrieved 2019-06-13.

Reply 18-JUN-2019

Thank you for the changes you've made to the request. The information presented here is now much more complete. The only question I have left is regarding the following phrase:

RepresentUs members and partners supported more than 20 successful anti-corruption campaigns in 2018

Please elaborate on the meaning of the word supported as it is used in this context.
Specifically, what needs to be made clear is how and in what way RepresentUs is able to claim "support" of these initiatives, and what that word support should mean to a reader who is unfamiliar with RepresentUs.
I apologize if that meaning has already been made in the article itself. If so, please advise on location of this text.
When ready to proceed with the requested information, kindly change the {{request edit}} template's answer parameter to read from |ans=yes to |ans=no. Thank you!
Regards, Spintendo 12:20, 18 June 2019 (UTC)

Reply 22-JUL-2019

To better define the meaning of support while avoiding a verbose introductory section line, I propose the following amendment of the RepresentUs#Strategy section:

Strategy

RepresentUs proposes the passage of anti-corruption laws through the ballot initiative process in cities and states to avoid political gridlock at the federal level.^[1] The laws, based on model legislation called the American Anti-Corruption Act, are designed "to protect communities from corruption and build momentum for national reform."^[2] Locally initiated ballot measures allow citizens to vote on its policy proposal directly.

RepresentUs places a heavy emphasis on grassroots organizing by using a staff of organizers to help manage a national network of volunteers and volunteer-led chapters.^[3] The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook,^[4] YouTube,^[5] Twitter,^[6] and Instagram ^[7] to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns as well as to connect potential supporters with the anti-corruption movement. RepresentUs provides volunteer networks with the training, organization, and mobilization needed to foster change on both the local and national level.^[8] Additionally, RepresentUs identifies and assesses emerging state and local campaigns to provide those it deems both transformative and politically viable with additional assets, staff support, and the expertise needed for passage. Citing similar successes in the cases of Women's suffrage, Same-sex marriage, and Interracial Marriage, RepresentUs pushes for the state-by-state passage of anti-corruption acts to culminate in bringing about the passage of the American Anti-Corruption Act in the federal government.^[9]^[10]

RepresentUs is a nonpartisan organization with a board, staff, and membership composed of liberals, conservatives, and independents. The organization does not endorse or oppose political candidates so that it maintains a nonpartisan stance.

References

[1]
"Sick of Money Corrupting Politics? Take the Fight Local". BillMoyers.com. Retrieved 2015-11-09.
[2]
"About the Campaign - Gil Fulbright". Gil Fulbright. Retrieved 2015-11-09.
[3]
"All Is Not Lost: How to Win Money-in-Politics Reform". The Huffington Post. Retrieved 2015-11-09.
[4]
"RepresentUs". Facebook. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[5]
"RepresentUs". Youtube. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[6]
"RepresentUs". Twitter. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[7]
"representus". Instagram. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[8]
"REPRESENTUS TOOLS & TRAININGS". Represent.Us. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[9]
"HOW WE WORK". Represent.Us. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[10]
"THE STRATEGY TO END CORRUPTION". Represent.Us. Retrieved 2019-07-22.

Close

Kevin at RepresentUs (talk) 18:27, 22 July 2019 (UTC)

Reply 23-JUL-2019

Edit request partially implemented

Those initiatives which were independently notable in Wikipedia were added to the article under a 2018 election heading.^[a]
The Strategy section was not implemented because it does not describe verbatim which sections of text are to be added, which are to be removed, nor the reasoning for each particular change.^[1]

Regards, Spintendo 09:08, 23 July 2019 (UTC)

Notes

[a]
It should not escape detection that the current 2016 election section in the article does not WikiLink to the individual items described therein, as the now-added 2018 election section does. This makes the information in that section less-useful to the reader, as they are deprived of the ability to access additional information on the items. If the items do not have their own articles (or sections within articles) in Wikipedia then these items ought to be removed, because the article is about the RepresentUs organization and not about the individual election campaigns where notability has not been established. (See WP:COATRACK.)

References

[1]
"Template:Request edit". Wikipedia. 7 July 2019. Instructions for submitters #6: Describe the requested changes in detail. This includes the exact proposed wording of the new material, the exact proposed location for it, and an explicit description of any wording to be removed, including removal for any substitution. Be specific: "add X", "delete Y", "replace X with Y". If the rationale for a change is not obvious (particularly for proposed deletions), explain.

Edit Request

Part of an edit requested by an editor with a conflict of interest has been implemented. [See below]

Requesting the following changes to the second paragraph of the Strategy section:
(To "better define the meaning of the word "support" while avoiding a verbose introductory section line" within the 2016 election and 2018 election sections)

Within the sentence "The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook, YouTube, and Reddit to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns":

Replace "Reddit" with "Twitter, and Instagram" as examples of "social media platforms":^[a]
The organization also relies on a large social media following in platforms such as Facebook,^[1] YouTube,^[2] Twitter,^[3] and Instagram ^[4]
Expand the same sentence with the following addition at the end:^[b]
"...to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns as well as to connect potential supporters with the anti-corruption movement. "

Add the following sentences respectively at the end of the same "strategy" paragraph (following the above sentence):

RepresentUs provides volunteer networks with the training, organization, and mobilization needed to foster change on both the local and national level.^[5]^[c]
Additionally, RepresentUs identifies and assesses emerging state and local campaigns to provide those it deems both transformative and politically viable with additional assets, staff support, and the expertise needed for passage.^[6]^[d]
Citing the cases of Women's suffrage, Same-sex marriage, and Interracial Marriage as examples in which the passage of state laws eventually led to federal reform, RepresentUs believes the state-by-state passage of anti-corruption acts will similarly culminate in bringing about the passage of the American Anti-Corruption Act in the federal government.^[7]^[e]

Notes

[a]
Adding direct links to "RepresentUs" social media pages may fall outside of Wikipedia SOP, updating examples to list those that can actually be sourced is the core intent of this change.
[b]
To more accurately define the meaning of how the organization "relies" on social media, as well as to give a better sense of how the organization establishes a "national network of volunteers and volunteer-led chapters" as stated in the preceding sentence.
[c]
Elaboration on how the organization uses/establishes its "volunteer networks", summarizing the list of tools/resources the organization directs towards volunteers on their website.
[d]
An expansion of how the organization "proposes the passage of anti-corruption laws" (as stated in the leading sentence of the "strategy section") either directly or through its volunteer network. Gives context to the meaning of "support" in the leading sentences of the "2016 election" and "2018 election" sections.
[e]
A summation of the overarching strategy/goal that the organization operates under. Reiteration in plainer language as well as supporting why "RepresentUs proposes the passage of anti-corruption laws through the ballot initiative process in cities and states to avoid political gridlock at the federal level."

References

[1]
"RepresentUs". Facebook. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[2]
"RepresentUs". Youtube. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[3]
"RepresentUs". Twitter. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[4]
"representus". Instagram. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[5]
"REPRESENTUS TOOLS & TRAININGS". Represent.Us. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[6]
"HOW WE WORK". Represent.Us. Retrieved 2019-07-22.
[7]
"THE STRATEGY TO END CORRUPTION". Represent.Us. Retrieved 2019-07-22.

Kevin at RepresentUs (talk) 17:04, 23 July 2019 (UTC)

Reply 23-JUL-2019

Edit request partially implemented

Y The claims regarding social media were updated to include Twitter, Instagram, and YouTube, and omit Reddit.
N A repeat explanation of how the organization uses social media to connect to the "anti-corruption movement" is not necessary, as the claim already states that the organization uses social media to draw attention to its public education and advocacy campaigns.
N The next two items involve a description of how the organization operates. The fact that the organization advocates for change is admirable; however, allowing it to describe in detail how it goes about achieving those goals is not the purpose of Wikipedia, per WP:NOTADVOCACY.
N The final item involves claims regarding what the organization believes may occur in the future as the result of its advocacy. (See WP:NOTACRYSTALBALL.)

Regards, Spintendo 18:45, 23 July 2019 (UTC)

Edit Request

Revamp coming

Jennifer Lawrence in the infobox

I checked a few other nonpartisan organizations and none of them have a picture of a person. I don't know what a picture of an organization would be, but I do not believe it is meant to single out one board member. Jennifer Lawrence is being used as decoration here because she is a young attractive woman. Polycarpa aurata (talk) 15:37, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

Jennifer Lawrence is a major spokesperson for the organization; check out this video which she narrated. That said, you do have a point about most wikipages of nonprofits not having a spokesperson in the image slot. Maybe we could move the image of Lawrence a bit farther down.--Tomwsulcer (talk) 21:14, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for your comment, Tomwsulcer, but I don't think that the article is improved by having a picture of Jennifer Lawrence. How does it aid the readers of Wikipedia in understanding what RepresentUs is all about? How do any of the pictures of individual people help readers? Polycarpa aurata (talk) 23:01, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

How do images help any Wikipedia page? By informing. And images help tell readers that this nonprofit organization has focused much of its effort on recruiting celebrities, and they've been successful at it. Their celebrity connections are key to their ability to connect with everybody. Did you watch the video? Did you read the article?--Tomwsulcer (talk) 23:21, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

Images help readers by illustrating things that the text is describing. If the article were about Jennifer Lawrence, a picture would help readers recognize her. This article is not about Jennifer Lawrence or Michael Douglas or Josh Silver. Knowing what they look like doesn't help readers understand what the organization does. Those images only serve as decoration. I suggest removing them entirely. Polycarpa aurata (talk) 23:57, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

If you read the text, you'll see that a huge way that this organization communicates its passion for constructive political reform is through the media using celebrities. It's what they do. The images reinforce this important relation.--Tomwsulcer (talk) 00:05, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

Tomwsulcer, I see the section RepresentUs#Celebrity involvement. It has a list of people. There is no need to also have pictures of some of those people. Polycarpa aurata (talk) 00:18, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

This nonprofit has sought and won the support of numerous prominent celebrities, which is well-referenced, and their involvement is relevant to this subject.--Tomwsulcer (talk) 01:07, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

Tomwsulcer, I understand that and it is already covered in the page. How do the pictures help the reader understand more about that then the text already tells them? That is the question I think you should be addressing. Polycarpa aurata (talk) 03:46, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

A picture says a thousand words; while words have a minimum of explanatory power, images have much more impact. I bet most readers only glance over the text, but they will see the images, and those images convey that this nonprofit has successfully enlisted the help of these celebrities. Would you like the entire encyclopedia to be devoid of all images?--Tomwsulcer (talk) 04:02, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

That is a lovely aphorism, but I don't think it applies here. RepresntUs isn't a thing that is better seen than explained in words. I keep asking how the pictures help readers understand what RepresentUs does - do you have an answer to that question? Polycarpa aurata (talk) 04:24, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

I removed the image of Jennifer Lawrence (a headshot with zero context/connection to this article) as I agree it is out of place here. If the image of the founder is going to be deleted for copyright issues, the best thing to do would be to find an alternative photo of that person. The description of the Lawrence image suggests it has been cropped from an image of her with the founder - that might be an acceptable use here to show how she is connected to the organisation. And can we please try to keep this discussion focused on the issue at hand - no one is suggesting that we make the "entire encyclopedia devoid of all images" - what is in dispute is whether this particular image has any real value here other than promotionalism. Thanks Melcous (talk) 23:18, 6 February 2022 (UTC)

Melcous, i think you are mistaken. Neither of the founders was in that picture. Josh Hutcherson is an actor. Polycarpa aurata (talk) 00:32, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Yes, thanks for pointing that out Polycarpa aurata, I did misread that. So the image does appear entirely unrelated to this particular organisation. Melcous (talk) 11:48, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

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