User talk:EvinYZhao

--== Thoughts on Griffon Vulture page ==

This article has a large amount of revisions centering on the Further Reading section. There are a very large amount of revisions of previous edits.

In the talking page, one user offers three pictures of griffon vultures asking advice on which to use for the lead image. There is one comment discussing ways to replace the mass of bullet points that comprise the majority of the article.

This article is initially well organized and written, with a clear lead and table of contents. It is structured thematically in a coherent manner. It is neutral. It has a strong and unbiased references section. However, this article is marred by its overly long section on status in Europe and Asia. It is not structured well.

This article lacks a section on the ecology or physiology of the Griffon Vulture. The “Status in Europe and Asia” section could be abridged into a more coherent section on the conservation status of the Griffon Vulture. --EvinYZhao (talk) 15:27, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

I absolutely agree with your assessment of the "too many bullet points" problem in the Status in Asia. You might also want to look into cleaning up the references section once you look at Status in Asia - many of those sources will likely become redundant if you eliminate parts of that section. --Michael.stankov (talk) 15:31, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

You should also look at the Intraspecific Competition segment of the page, since it doesn't seem to add much and is derived singularly by one source. --Michael.stankov (talk) 15:49, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi Evin, thanks for your thorough evaluation of the Griffon Vulture article, and for posting feedback to Michael's talk page. I will assign the vulture article to you for your Wiki work this semester.Rico.schultz (talk) 18:33, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

Evin, thanks for your modification of the physiology portion of the article on frogs. Please add a citation to your statement (e.g. the willmer book).Rico.schultz (talk) 02:09, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

For my draft on the Griffon Vulture page I added a physiology section and added a little to the intraspecific competition section. I would like peer advice as to what to do with the mass of bullet points for their status in Eurasia. Thanks EvinYZhao (talk) 05:28, 25 April 2016 (UTC)

@EvinYZhao: Evin, I think you should put the comment above on the talk page for the article you are revising... only we will see it here. I think you should also comment on which of three photos is best for the lead image, responding to DrChrissy's post to the talk page of 1.25 years ago. Also, thanks for your judicious comments on Michael's song sparrow contributions Rico.schultz (talk) 16:34, 29 April 2016 (UTC)