Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Battle of Yarmouk

Battle of Yarmouk

Nominator(s): الله أكبرMohammad Adil

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I am nominating this article for A-Class review because... after having this article peer reviewed twice, and following all the suggestions and advices given by the reviewers i felt confident that it meets the requirements. Regards.... الله أكبرMohammad Adil 22:09, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

• Comments
  • No problems reported with ambiguous links. One external links is reported as suspicious, please check and advise. A Number of your images are missing alt text, please add this to the article forthwith.
  • In the prelude section you have the following line:"After his overwhelming victories over the Persian and their allies in Caucasus and Armenia, Heraclius, in 627, launched a daring winter offensive against the Persians in Mesopotamia winning a decisive victory at the Battle of Nineveh thus threatening the Persian capital city of Ctesiphon." I suggest removing the word daring, that sounds link undo weight, and there is no cite specifically for the daring offensive.
  • The second paragraph in the prelude section has no sources, no references. This is unacceptable for an A-class article, please locate and a source or two for the information presented in the paragraph.
  • Throughout the article there are lists that give measurements in metric, however no corresponding standard measurement is given for the metric measurement. Can you fix this please.
  • How big is a substantial gap? A couple hundred? A few thousand? A mile or more? See about tightening that up if you can.
  • What does 'inviting to Islam' mean? Is that an invitation to convert, or just a welcome diplomatic exchange?
  • You have a citation needed tag in the Day 4 section that needs to be addressed.
  • In the Day 6 section there is no cite for the phase three part, please add one. TomStar81 (Talk) 17:31, 16 January 2010 (UTC)

Done.....

alt text fixed, References provided, unit conversion formula added for meter to feet and km to miles.

As for the external link, its working fine, i opened it, i have further added a retrieved date with it.

As for how much gap was there, my personal opinion will carry no weight and modern historians avoided any specific figure, they just said "there was substantial gaps between the divisions."

My personal estimate is that there was around 500 meter gap between each of the four divisions.

Inviting to islam, means inviting for conversion to islam, it was their tradition of sending preaching embassies to courts, in most of the cases they will do both, negotiations and preachings.

الله أكبرMohammad Adil 20:30, 16 January 2010 (UTC)

Can you work a bit harder on your alt text? Its suppose to 'describe an image to a blind man reading the article;, and alt text like 'day 2 phase 1' don't really explain anything. TomStar81 (Talk) 00:05, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

Done...

I hv added a detail description of the battle maps in the alt text, also added alt text in the infobox image.

الله أكبرMohammad Adil 11:23, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

• Support TomStar81 (Talk) 17:09, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
• Comment I tend towards oppose because the article doesn't seem stable. Wandalstouring (talk) 07:52, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

why ? there isnt any edit war going on right now or in recent past.الله أكبرMohammad Adil 08:29, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

• There are still some cites incorrectly placed before the punctuation YellowMonkey (bananabucket) 04:56, 28 January 2010 (UTC)

There were 4, I have fixed them all. Any other issue ?الله أكبرMohammad Adil 20:20, 28 January 2010 (UTC)

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