Talk:EOS Group

Dear Theroadislong (talk · contribs), thanks for your quick review. However, I cannot share your assessment that a promotional article would have been written here. What sections or sentences are written like this? Can you give details?

In my opinion, a promotional article would contain no statement about criticism of the company. Also such an article would certainly say nothing about the data leak/data theft. Even about lobbying, ie representation of interests or influencing, such an article would certainly give nothing.

This article is a translation from the de.wikipedia.org. There it has not been criticized, although many Wikipedians observe it.

When writing it, I made sure that neutrality was ensured. With the history section, I believe no one can advertise a company. The history section is based in part on two business-related sources. These are anniversary publications that show stages of corporate development. In some cases I referred on business reports of OTTO. But the section on history also refers to many sources that have nothing to do with EOS or OTTO. These are for example:

• Hamburger Abendblatt
• Die Welt
• Welt am Sonntag
• tw - Thema Wirtschaft
• Financial Times Deutschland
• Der Versandhausberater
• ONEtoONE
• El Confidencial
• Markt und Mittelstand
• Immobilien & Finanzierung – Der Langfristige Kredit
• Wirtschaftswoche

Other sections also use sources like:

• Bayerische Staatszeitung
• Vente d'Alphapay
• Frankfurter Allgemeine Zeitung
• Mitteldeutsche Zeitung
• Neue Osnabrücker Zeitung
• Winsener Anzeiger
• Die Tageszeitung
• Behörden Spiegel
• Lebensmittel Zeitung
• Werben & Verkaufen
• Express
• Computer Magazin für die Praxis
• c't
• Donaukurier
• Die Zeit
• Der Standard
• Süddeutsche Zeitung
• Der Tagesspiegel
• Impulse
• Controlling & management review. Zeitschrift für Controlling & Management
• VerkehrsRundschau
• Tages-Anzeiger
• Bloomberg

I thought again: Are there any possibilities of reduction? I can see that in the section on business figures. I have shortened the section significantly. In my opinion this also underlines that no advertising has been done.

What do you think? Atomiccocktail (talk) 09:29, 20 July 2018 (UTC)

Comment: Promotional terms include for example "The EOS Group has more than 55 operating companies with locations in 26 countries" "regarded as Germany’s largest debt collection provider" " quickly developed into one of the largest debt collecting companies in the Federal Republic of Germany" "EOS says that it covers 180 countries along with its partner organisations" " It dominates the financial services segment within the Group" Theroadislong (talk) 09:56, 20 July 2018 (UTC) 

Dear Theroadislong (talk · contribs),

Thank you for your immediate feedback. I moved the discussion to the disc page. I think that suits better here.

I made some changes.

• I changed the first sentence. Now there are no more numbers given.
• A source is given for the statement "regarded as Germany's largest debt collection provider".
• You're right: "quickly developed into one of the largest ...." I deleted the "quickly" and specified a source.
• The statement "It dominates the financial services segment within the Group" now has three sources from different years: Wirtschaftswoche, Handelsblatt and OTTO's latest annual report.
• "EOS says it covers 180 countries along with its partner organizations." I deleted this sentence without substitution.

Thanks for your hints. What do you think? Is that OK? Atomiccocktail (talk) 14:09, 20 July 2018 (UTC)

Hello Theroadislong (talk · contribs), would you like to take another look at last changes? Is the draft ok now? Atomiccocktail (talk) 15:50, 31 July 2018 (UTC)

You are being paid to edit, I am not, I have no further help to offer. Theroadislong (talk) 17:37, 31 July 2018 (UTC)