These sentences on the lead are exceptionally badly written. The whole point of this writing seems to underline again and again the crime committed, at cost of readability. It sounds like tabloid scandal headlines more than an encyclopedia.
Letourneau was 34, and the child, Vili Fualaau, was 12 years old when she initiated the sexual abuse. He was her sixth-grade student at an elementary school in Burien, Washington. While awaiting sentencing, she gave birth to Fualaau's daughter.
After the first sentence that correctly introduces the crime, the followings should come back to the fact in a cronological order. Starting from where she teached, her family status at the time, how she encountered Fualaau, how they met, how she approached him sexually, the police being tipped off, etc. Cinemaandpolitics (talk) 15:39, 18 October 2024 (UTC)
- For comparison, looking at a page that editors could find equally despicable, the Hitler page would be useful. Even though the Holocaust has its central spot in the lead it doesn't immediatelly erase the need for more general writing in following paragraphs. Cinemaandpolitics (talk) 09:15, 22 October 2024 (UTC)
- I've expanded the chronology of their encounters on body and then moved on in expanding the lead. Notably I've reworded "sexual abuse" in "statutory rape". MOS:CRIMINAL is pretty clear that general definitions should be avoided in favor of precise crimes, which the opening paragraph correctly did already. Cinemaandpolitics (talk) 18:20, 22 October 2024 (UTC)
