Hi, I'd like to make a few suggestions for changes to improve the content of the article, with the goal of making sure the information in this article is accurate and clear. While I am not a financial expert, I am proposing these changes on behalf of the Managed Funds Association, who are providing guidance on the concepts involved here. As I do have a conflict of interest here, I won't be making any edits to the article but hope that other editors will review my suggestions and make them if they're appropriate.
The first two suggestions I have are for the lead. To the end of the first paragraph, I'd like to suggest adding the following statement in green, which clarifies the relative leverage size of entities conducting business within the shadow banking system:
- The shadow banking system is the collection of financial entities, infrastructure and practices which support financial transactions that occur beyond the reach of existing state sanctioned monitoring and regulation. It includes entities such as hedge funds, money market funds and structured investment vehicles (SIV). Investment banks may conduct much of their business in the shadow banking system (SBS), but most are not SBS institutions themselves.[1][2] Among these entities, money market funds and investment banks hold the largest assets in real dollars and typically employ more leverage than the others, particularly hedge funds.[3]
For the second change, I'd like to suggest replacing the below sentences from the beginning of the third paragraph of the lead:
- The volume of transactions in the shadow banking system grew dramatically after the year 2000. By late 2007 the size of the SBS in the U.S. exceeded $10 trillion and by late 2011 had increased to $24 trillion according to the Financial Stability Board.[1]
The first sentence is not supported by the source, nor is this information included later in the article. In addition, the source here does not support that the SBS was $10 trillion in 2007. According to a source I've found from the Financial Stability Board, the SBS actually reduced in size from 2007 to 2011. To improve the accuracy of this part of the lead, I'd like to suggest replacing the text in red above with the following:
- In 2007 the Financial Stability Board estimated the size of the SBS in the U.S. to be around $25 trillion, and by 2011 estimates decreased to $24 trillion.[1][2]
If these seem like reasonable changes, I hope someone will make them. This page is on my watchlist so feel free to reply here and I'll respond when I can. Cheers, WWB Too (Talk · COI) 19:11, 19 September 2012 (UTC)
- Hi, thanks for going to the trouble to explain this. Ive made the second change you requested with a few amendments, but Im not making the first. Its been a few years since I worked in an investment bank so could be wrong, but AFAIK money markets use next to no leverage. Also , while some sources do list them as being part of the SBS, this is only as they are less regulated than regular deposit taking banks, not as they perform shady, risky and complex transactions in the same way that some IB and HFs do. That said, youre right that MMs control more cash than HFs, and IB trading desks did often use far more leverage than the average HF, at least before the crisis. Just because Im not going to make the suggested edit doesnt mean Id revert it if you made it. For financial articles, there are very few active editors with good up to date knowledge of the sector. My advice for articles like this that arent being actively edited, is to make any desired edits yourself, and if you think there is a possible COI issue, make a note of it on the talk page. Ignore me if you want, but think it would be a better use of resource. FeydHuxtable (talk) 19:18, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
- Hi Feyd, sorry about the delay in following up. Thanks for updating the SBS size estimate from the FBS source; looks better. Though I'd like to ask again about the first request later, right now I'd like to propose adding citations for the unsourced first two sentences of the lead's third paragraph. (Also: I appreciate your invitation to edit directly, however I prefer to not do so, given my potential conflict of interest as a paid representative.)
- So the first of these sentences, covering the growth of the SBS following 2000, is actually verified by the FT article which is the final reference in this section. Alas, it isn't named. I'd suggest <ref name=Masters"/>. The second is the sentence you added, about its brief dip following the financial crisis. This report should cover it:
- <ref name="FCICR">{{Cite report |author= |authorlink= |coauthors= |date=January 2011 |title=Financial Crisis Inquiry Commission Report |url=http://fcic-static.law.stanford.edu/cdn_media/fcic-reports/fcic_final_report_chapter2.pdf |publisher=The Financial Crisis Inquiry Comission |chapter=Chapter 2 Shadow Banking |docket= |accessdate=12 October 2012 |quote= }}</ref>
- Mind adding those? Should be a simple thing. Cheers, WWB Too (Talk · COI) 19:55, 12 October 2012 (UTC)
- Done. The assertions were already covered by subsequent refs, the Masters source also partly covers the dip, and generally I dont like to have lots of refs in the lede, per MOS. But no harm in complying with your request, and the Inquiry source looks especially good for relating the SBS to the crisis. Re your first request, I still wont be adding it even in a modified form as I dont think its accurate or useful. But thats a matter of interpretation and maybe I have a bias in favor of IBs rather than HFs. As said I certainly wont revert if you get someone else to add it. Thanks again for explaining your requirements so clearly, not many bother to do that these days. FeydHuxtable (talk) 06:20, 15 October 2012 (UTC)
Suggestions for Entities that make up the system
Hi there, Feyd. Since you're interested in the subject and open to my suggestions (if not of like mind about everything) I'd actually like I move on to some of the other changes I'm interested in making. So here's what I've got:
I'd also like to propose changes to the Entities that make up the system section, which has had a "needs additional citations for verification" tag since June. The first paragraph is currently uncited. I would like to correct that by adding an appropriate source and also improve it by wikilinking some key words such as hedge funds. Below I've included the text that I propose and the markup for the new text:
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Complex legal entities comprising the system include [[hedge funds]], [[structured investment vehicle|structured investment vehicles]] (SIV), [[Special purpose entity|special purpose entity conduits]] (SPE), [[money market fund|money market funds]], [[repurchase agreement]] (repo) markets and other [[Non-bank financial institution|non-bank financial institutions]].<ref name=FRBNY12>{{cite web |url=http://www.ny.frb.org/research/staff_reports/sr458.pdf |title=Shadow Banking |last1=Pozsar |first1=Zoltan |last2=Adrian |first2=Tobias |last3=Ashcraft |first3=Adam |last4=Boesky |first4=Hayley |date=July 2012 |publisher=Federal Reserve Bank of New York |accessdate=19 September 2012}}</ref>
Within the same section, the fourth and fifth paragraphs currently state that:
- This largely unregulated sector was worth about $60 trillion in 2010, having grown from an estimated $27 trillion in 2002, according to the FSB. While the sector's assets declined during the global financial crisis, they have since returned to their pre-crisis peak.
- There are concerns that more business may move into the shadow banking system as regulators seek to bolster the financial system by making bank rules stricter.
This information is factually correct, but it is not cited and the language is in need of some tweaks to improve clarity. I propose the following replacement text with new citations:
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This largely unregulated sector was worth an estimated $60 trillion in 2010, compared to prior FSB estimates of $27 trillion in 2002. [1][2] While the sector's assets declined during the global financial crisis, they have since returned to their pre-crisis peak. [3]
There are concerns that more business may move into the shadow banking system as regulators seek to bolster the financial system by making bank rules stricter.[3]
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This largely unregulated sector was worth an estimated $60 trillion in 2010, compared to prior FSB estimates of $27 trillion in 2002.<ref name=FSB>{{cite press release |title=Shadow Banking: Strengthening Oversight and Regulation |url=http://www.financialstabilityboard.org/publications/r_111027a.pdf |publisher=Financial Stability Board |date= 27 October 2011 |accessdate=11 September 2012}}</ref><ref name=Masters>{{cite news |title=Shadow banking surpasses pre-crisis level |author=Brooke Masters |url=http://www.ft.com/cms/s/0/39c6a414-00b9-11e1-930b-00144feabdc0.html#axzz1zNL3SjGW |work=Financial Times |date=27 October 2011 |accessdate=11 September 2012}}</ref> While the sector's assets declined during the global financial crisis, they have since returned to their pre-crisis peak.<ref name=QA>{{cite web |url=http://www.reuters.com/article/2012/02/07/us-shadow-banking-idUSTRE81611820120207 |title=Q+A - What is shadow banking and why does it matter? |work=Reuters |author-Michelle Martin |date=7 February 2012 |accessdate=19 September 2012}}</ref>
There are concerns that more business may move into the shadow banking system as regulators seek to bolster the financial system by making bank rules stricter.<ref name=QA/>
If these seem like sensible changes, are you willing to add them? Or, if you have questions and want to discuss, I'll try to respond in a timely manner. Cheers, WWB Too (Talk · COI) 15:33, 16 October 2012 (UTC)
- These references seem useful and wording improves the article so have implemented them and removed the tag. Sargdub (talk) 03:24, 17 October 2012 (UTC)
Shadow banks' role in the financial system and their modus operandi
Thanks Sargdub, for your help with the change above. If you and / or FeydHuxtable are interested, I have another proposal addressing unsourced material, this time in the Shadow banks' role in the financial system and their modus operandi subsection.
To the current text, I'd like to propose adding a citation to support the current information, along with some further contextualizing details. Below is the section, with the citations and new text I propose (shown in green):
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Like traditional banks, shadow banks provide credit and liquidity but, unlike their traditional counterparts, they do not have access to central bank funding or safety nets like deposit insurance. [1][2] Unlike traditional banks, shadow banks do not take deposits. Instead, they rely on short-term funding provided either by asset-backed commercial paper or by the repo market, in which borrowers offer collateral as security against a cash loan and then sell the security to a lender and agree to repurchase it at an agreed time in the future for an agreed price. [1] The shadow banking sector operates across the American, European, and Chinese financial sectors,[3][4] and in perceived tax havens worldwide.[1] Shadow banks invest in long-term loans like mortgages, providing credit across the financial system by matching investors and borrowers individually or by becoming part of a chain involving numerous entities, some of which may be mainstream banks.[1]
Given their specialized nature, shadow banks often can provide credit more cost-efficiently than traditional banks.[1] Before the financial crisis began, the shadow banking system had overtaken the regular banking system in supplying loans to businesses, home and car buyers, students, credit credit users, and many other borrowers.[5] Shadow banks are often able to provide credit to people or entities who might not otherwise have such access.[1]
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Like traditional banks, shadow banks provide credit and liquidity but, unlike their traditional counterparts, they do not have access to central bank funding or safety nets like deposit insurance.<ref name=QA>{{cite web |url=http://www.reuters.com/article/2012/02/07/us-shadow-banking-idUSTRE81611820120207 |title=Q+A - What is shadow banking and why does it matter? |work=Reuters |author-Michelle Martin |date=7 February 2012 |accessdate=19 September 2012}}</ref><ref>{{cite web |url=http://books.google.com/books?id=q5S1uMWg-WUC&pg=PA381&lpg=PA381&dq=banking+system+not+regulated&source=bl&ots=mOuI4qRV96&sig=wXPIObwfnQx9BHRDY2rN7Gdxkm0&hl=en&sa=X&ei=PTVbUOTcC8TsiwLFqICYCg&ved=0CDMQ6AEwAA#v=onepage&q=banking%20system%20not%20regulated&f=false |title=Economics: Principles and Applications |authors=Robert E. Hall and Marc Lieberman |year=2009 |isbn= 1439038961 |publisher=South-Western College |pages=381-383}}</ref> Unlike traditional banks, shadow banks do not take deposits. Instead, they rely on short-term funding provided either by [[asset-backed commercial paper]] or by the repo market, in which borrowers offer [[Collateral (finance)|collateral]] as security against a cash loan and then sell the security to a lender and agree to repurchase it at an agreed time in the future for an agreed price.<ref name=QA/> The shadow banking sector operates across the American, European, and Chinese financial sectors,<ref>{{cite journal |url=http://papers.ssrn.com/sol3/papers.cfm?abstract_id=2027007 |title=An Assessment of the Shadow Banking Sector in Europe |author=Antoine Bouveret |date=6 July 2011 |accessdate=19 September 2012 |work=Observatoire Français des Conjonctures Economiques}}</ref><ref>{{cite web |url=http://business.financialpost.com/2012/07/19/should-we-be-worried-about-chinas-2-2-trillion-shadow-banking-system/ |title=Should we be worried about China’s $2.2-trillion shadow banking system? |author=Matthew Boesler |work=Financial Post |publisher=National Post date=18 July 2012 |accessdate=19 September 2012}}</ref> and in perceived [[tax haven]]s worldwide.<ref name=QA>{{cite web |url=http://www.reuters.com/article/2012/02/07/us-shadow-banking-idUSTRE81611820120207 |title=Q+A - What is shadow banking and why does it matter? |work=Reuters |author-Michelle Martin |date=7 February 2012 |accessdate=19 September 2012}}</ref> Shadow banks invest in long-term loans like mortgages, providing credit across the financial system by matching investors and borrowers individually or by becoming part of a chain involving numerous entities, some of which may be mainstream banks.<ref name=QA/>
Given their specialized nature, shadow banks often can provide credit more cost-efficiently than traditional banks.<ref name=QA>{{cite web |url=http://www.reuters.com/article/2012/02/07/us-shadow-banking-idUSTRE81611820120207 |title=Q+A - What is shadow banking and why does it matter? |work=Reuters |author-Michelle Martin |date=7 February 2012 |accessdate=19 September 2012}}</ref> Before the financial crisis began, the shadow banking system had overtaken the regular banking system in supplying loans to businesses, home and car buyers, students, credit credit users, and many other borrowers.<ref>{{cite web |url=http://books.google.com/books?id=mfzDULGKMtAC&pg=PA781&lpg=PA781&dq=shadow+bank+credit+access&source=bl&ots=u3gbu1sqzk&sig=AotyBnK_l-M46wd18Paxd-KkwjY&hl=en&sa=X&ei=MDRaUOrtLsSHygHCkoHoAg&ved=0CGMQ6AEwCQ#v=onepage&q=shadow%20bank%20credit%20access&f=false |title=Economics: Principles and Applications |authors=Robert E. Hall and Marc Lieberman |year=2009 |isbn= 1439038961 |publisher=South-Western College |page=791}}</ref> Shadow banks are often able to provide credit to people or entities who might not otherwise have such access.<ref name=QA/>
Once again, if these edits are reasonable, I hope that editors will make them. Cheers, WWB Too (Talk · COI) 15:54, 19 October 2012 (UTC)
- Hi WWB_Too, thanks again for the excellent way you present your requests. I've implemented them, though with some additional paraphrasing. Please dont take this as a criticism, its just I've several times witnessed the horror at RfA, where hoardes of elitists often like to brand good editors as plaigurists and copyright violators just because they've copied a couple of sentences from sources with only minor changes and without using quotation marks. (Even when the sources are cited). Your suggested changes were certainly a massive improvement. All that said, please dont message me about this topic again on my talk. Almost all your suggested edits are of excellent quality, but Im no longer especially interested in this topic and there are so many other matters requiring attention... FeydHuxtable (talk) 13:48, 16 November 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for your help here Feyd. I understand about your not being interested in this topic any longer and I'll see if I can find others who can help with any further requests. Cheers, WWB Too (Talk · COI) 18:40, 16 November 2012 (UTC)
One last suggestion
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I have one final, small suggestion to improve this article. The Importance section currently outlines the growth of the shadow banking sector and details its important role as a credit provider in the financial system. The data contained here is fine, but the last line inaccurately summarizes the preceding excerpt from a 2008 Timothy Geithner speech. The line currently reads as follows:
- In other words, lending through the shadow banking system slightly exceeded lending via the traditional banking system based on outstanding balances.
Geithner's quote actually explains that "non-banking financial system" activity is growing; not that lending through the shadow banking system exceeded traditional lending. Even if the more ambiguous "shadow banking" term had been used, it is still not correct to equate assets held by broad industry categories with volume of lending offered by SBS institutions. SBS lending is a completely different exercise than what a hedge fund does or what the assets of a bank holding company are.
I propose that we cut this summary line and simply let the quotation speak for itself. If this change seems neutral and acceptable to others, I hope another editor will implement it. Please let me know if you have any questions. Cheers, WWB Too (Talk · COI) 17:12, 19 November 2012 (UTC)
- As this last one didn't take much thought, I thought I sort it for you to save you waiting. FeydHuxtable (talk) 19:24, 20 November 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, unexpected but appreciated! Thanks for taking the trouble, Feyd. WWB Too (Talk · COI) 22:08, 20 November 2012 (UTC)