User talk:Cutecauliflower
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- Thank you! I'll take a look and orient myself. Cutecauliflower 16:21, 20 October 2022 (UTC)
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Hi Cutecauliflower. Thank you for your work on Bill Carmody (lawyer). Another editor, Bneu2013, has reviewed it as part of new pages patrol and left the following comment:
I suggest rewording some parts of the article to a more neutral tone. Some people might perceive the article in its current state as promotional.
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Bneu2013 (talk) 23:58, 27 February 2026 (UTC)
- @Bneu2013: Hi Bneu2013, thanks for reviewing the page. I can make further edits. I tried to keep it informational but fresh eyes always help. Do you have specific suggestions on what I could change? Cutecauliflower (talk) 02:39, 28 February 2026 (UTC)
- Overall, it's very well written, and I don't think I have any major issues with the article. There are just a few instances of minor language that I think some people might interpret as promotional. For example, some people might think that the reference to his "first big win" sounds like something out of a legal ad. I would have probably worded this as something like "his first major case" (or if it wasn't his first major case, just the first one he won; his "first major legal victory"). I'll admit the phrase "though he rarely bills by the hour" immediately struck me as sounding exactly like stuff I hear in personal injury lawyer ads everyday, although I know what you're trying to say, and don't see any issue with this wording. I would also recommend discussing the types of law he practices in the lead. Bneu2013 (talk) 06:04, 28 February 2026 (UTC)
- Gotcha. That totally makes sense. I made a few changes based on your suggestions. Thanks! Cutecauliflower (talk) 23:11, 28 February 2026 (UTC)
- Overall, it's very well written, and I don't think I have any major issues with the article. There are just a few instances of minor language that I think some people might interpret as promotional. For example, some people might think that the reference to his "first big win" sounds like something out of a legal ad. I would have probably worded this as something like "his first major case" (or if it wasn't his first major case, just the first one he won; his "first major legal victory"). I'll admit the phrase "though he rarely bills by the hour" immediately struck me as sounding exactly like stuff I hear in personal injury lawyer ads everyday, although I know what you're trying to say, and don't see any issue with this wording. I would also recommend discussing the types of law he practices in the lead. Bneu2013 (talk) 06:04, 28 February 2026 (UTC)