Talk:Dani Rowe

Prose comments

Sorry in advance if I try to fix anything that's perfectly fine under British English (since I know there are some small differences in word usage between it and American English), feel free to pass on a suggestion if that's the case.

General

• There's a lot of MOS:EASTEREGG links; for example, in the lead, "world champion", "European champion", "world title", and "gold medal" are all links which seemingly refer to a generic term unless clicked upon, making it a bit difficult to comfortably navigate. While not all of them have to be changed, I'd suggest clarifying the wikilinks when possible to do so. For example, "world title" could instead link "world title in 2012", etc.
• The Life and Career section could perhaps use some subheadings; looking at some similar cycling articles, many of them divide by stages of career or by year (e.g. Katy Marchant, Evgeni Berzin).

Article

• "Youngster" seems a bit informal
• "she participated in testing hosted by British Cycling at her school. Rowe was then selected to join the Talent Team." Perhaps this could be rephrased to "she participated in testing hosted by British Cycling at her school, who then selected her to join its Talent Team."
• "Portsmouth School of Cycle Racing which was based at" -> "Portsmouth School of Cycle Racing, based in" - sounds a bit smoother
• "Having joined the Talent Team in 2005" - is this necessary to say?
• "Entered in" -> "Entered"
• "For 2009" -> "In 2009"
• "as well as recording" -> "and recorded". Also, remove comma after "(as a member of Horizon Fitness)"
• "successfully progressing through" -> "passing" - more concise, perhaps
• Avoid using "the following month" twice in three sentences, so maybe rephrase one of them to use the actual month
• "Rowe was part of the team pursuit line-up that secured victory" -> "Rowe secured victory as part of the team pursuit line-up" - avoid unnecessary passive voice
• "she also came" -> "also came" - subject is clear
• See above regarding "the following month"
• "as well as claiming" -> "and claimed"
• "rode in qualifying" - is this the common term? "rode in the qualifiers" seems more natural
• "gold medal in the team pursuit again riding" - put comma between "team pursuit" and "again"
• "also set" - the "also" is unnecessary
• "sixth consecutive race that" -> "sixth consecutive race in which"
• "also recorded" - see above
• "at the next leg" -> "in the next leg"
• "broke their own record twice more" - clarify, did they break it earlier in the event as well?
• "recovering from her crash the previous year" - "the previous year" seems redundant
• Regarding the decision not to select Rowe, perhaps the mention of Rowe's ranking and Emma Pooley should be attributed in-text (either to a specific writer, or like "commentators noted"), to avoid giving the impression of synthesis or OR.
• "Rowe, and her team pursuit teammates" - drop the comma

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Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Addressed via comments above
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Lead: It might be helpful to add some brief detail about her personal life and honors to the lead, since the lead should summarize most aspects of the article. Other than that, good enough to pass. Layout: Pass Words to watch: Pass (none found) Fiction: Pass, N/A List incorporation: Pass (I'm a bit surprised that there's not a table template for this, but it's standard across all the cycling GAs I've checked).
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Pass
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Pass, everything is cited inline appropriately to a reliable source, with the exception of the Major Results section that has a general supporting source
	2c. it contains no original research.	Spot check: Refs 5, 10, 15, 20, 25, 30, 35, 40, 45, 50, 55, 60, 65, 70, 75 all verify the information cited. Given the lack of any problems, I think checking 20% of sources is enough to pass this.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Pass, copyvio tool checks out, and prose is appropriate summary of event results rather than close paraphrasing
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Pass, it covers what I'd expect from a sports article (career, personal life, accolades).
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Pass. I'm not too familiar with cycling articles, but all the results mentioned in the article seem to be pretty significant for her career, so the level of detail seems appropriate.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Pass, tone is neutral and accolades are given appropriate weight
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Pass
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Pass, image is tagged and is CC-BY-SA 4.0
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Pass, infobox image is relevant, helpful, has appropriate caption
	7. Overall assessment.	Pass

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