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This article should be flagged for cleanup.

Is it just me, or does this entire article seem like a love letter to this organization? 122.148.184.76 06:54, 18 June 2007 (UTC)

If you can write it better, why don't you?--Redaktor 14:05, 19 June 2007 (UTC)

It reads like a pamphlet on this organization and not an encyclopedic entry. It is obviously copied from some kind of article written about this organization. As a lifelong Brooklyn resident I can say that this organization is not the sunshine and clovers portrayed in this article. As evidenced in the article itself, they routinely "stop and question strangers" in their neighborhoods. They have also been charged with excessive force on many occasions. Kingbinary 08:31, 26 August 2007 (UTC)—Preceding unsigned comment added by Kingbinary (talkcontribs) 17:13, August 25, 2007 (UTC)


THere are a lot of POV statesments in this article, one going so far as to claim that it is NOT a POV statement. Also some derogatory comments toward the end that cite no sources claiming that shomrim volunteers apprehend and BEAT suspects prior to police arrival. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.47.43.110 (talk) 02:50, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

crownheights shomrim

I can personally testify to the great work shomrim does. I have seen them save a life on one occasion and have called upon them when I was in distress and you can be certain they pulled through for me. I will go even further and say that even when it comes to non-emergency's they are there to help, like lock-outs etc. Also what it says in the article that shmira has more units then shomrim this is true in quantity but certainly not in quality. It says in the article that's most residence prefer to call shmira over shomrim, I have trouble digesting that fact for as I live in crownheights and between the peopole I know most of them have the shomrim hot-line on speed-dial. Also as of the present shmira is not under the auspices of the crownheights community council. May shomrim have much success crownheights loves you!. 66.8.202.60 (talk) 21:31, 27 January 2008 (UTC)crownheights resident±

Agreeing to cleanup this mess

Its irrelevant whether you agree or not with the Shomrim's action. The way this thing reads is definitely *not* an encyclopedic article, but a blanket pamphlet of this group. Someone should write it better. How could you possibly argue that a words like "ingenuity" and the like are products of a particular marketing and not an objective argument? 76.15.177.207 (talk) 12:39, 22 May 2008 (UTC)

NPOV

It was very kind of the previous editors to note that this article is POV but not touch it. I have flagged it as POV. The article was unbelievable: "The organization's professionalism is exemplary." "From the beginning, the Maccabees established itself as a citizen task-force that worked hand-in-hand with the local authorities, never overstepping the boundaries of its own capabilities." And there is no mention of the 1991 Crown Heights riots, in which these task forces played a significant role. Ipsenaut (talk) 05:16, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

The description of the Shomrim makes them sound like a very racist Jewish neighborhood watch. They only accept Jews as members. They primarily protect Jews, rather than neighborhood residents per se. What they do with a criminal often depends on whether he is Jewish or not. Although these things, if they are true, would certainly make the Shomrim organizations a collection of Jewish racist gangs, that does not mean that they are a bad thing for Jews. In fact, it sounds like the Jews are doing what we should all be doing, guarding our own tribe first and above all others. 74.47.80.190 (talk) 09:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)

Trying to clean up article

I keep trying to fix article and make it factual, but it keeps getting changed back to the same public relations lies. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Attention whore (talkcontribs) 22:27, 3 June 2008 (UTC)

You're clearly trying to be inflammatory, if you have criticism of the group (I'm sure you do) phrase it in neutral manner without commentary and source it and it will stay - Schrandit (talk) 22:33, 3 June 2008 (UTC)

No footnotes

This article is difficult to use. Mostly because it has no inline references. Additionally such references may help to resolve the ongoing neutrality dispute. Please note I am not taking sides in any squabbles, but encyclopedias need citations. Awg1010 (talk) 04:01, 1 November 2008 (UTC)

  • Actually, encyclopedias don't need citations. WikiPedia does, because of its inferiority complex :).Dovid (talk) 15:50, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

Cleanup January 2010

I went through the article and removed:

  • links in violation of WP:EL
  • sections on individual organisations - there could be an infinite number of these and there is no room for them all. All were unreferenced, some with six month old fact tags. Most were poorly written or just straight out adverts.

Several people have reinserted material without discussion. Please try and explain what you think should be in the article. It is not acceptable to just re-add things that have been removed without discussion. ninety:one 17:02, 27 January 2010 (UTC)

Suggested move

Rather than this be an article about a given organization that seems to be failing WP:N, I'd like to shift this to an article about independent Jewish neighborhood patrol groups.

There are groups like this most European communities, in South Africa, in Australia and in some North American communities. If there are no objections I'm going to redo this article to include the broader topic. Joe407 (talk) 10:39, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

Feel free to have a go, but I can't see any organisations really being notable enough at the moment. ninety:one 17:04, 14 February 2010 (UTC)

Update: I revised the article. I'd like to hear comments. Should more information be included about the individual orgs? More importantly, should the article name be changed? Is "Shomrim" a specific org.name or a concepts? Joe407 (talk) 05:55, 15 February 2010 (UTC)

3 contested edits.

Howdy, I'm taking the slightly unconventional move (WP:BOLD) and reverting the article to the version that I left it a few hours ago. No, I am not trying to WP:OWN the article and therefore I will explain the edit.

  1. The list of groups. As the article currently exists, its topic is volunteer civilian patrols in Jewish communities. Therefor, the London CSG and the Baltimore Shomrim are equally valid groups to be on a list in this article even though the London group is not called "shomrim". This is because there is no single body or organization but rather a number of communities creating similar groups with some of them choosing the same name.
  2. The inclusion of the Jewish Week article. My personal opinion aside, the Jewish Week passes WP:RS.
  3. Criticism. The paragraph was phrased carefully due to the JW article only reporting unnamed NYPD sources and official statements that were very bland. the sentence about the fellow who keeps a list of suspects is not part of a section called criticism as the article did not report anyone criticising him or the chapter.

Please discuss these points with me and I look forward to constructive criticism. Joe407 (talk) 20:08, 24 July 2011 (UTC)

  1. Well, you kept the list up, so there's nothing left for me to comment.
  2. and 3.- While it might pass as a valid reference for quoting news, the article in question doesn't have anybody quoted publicly. As long as there's nobody wiling to criticize the shomrim publicly, I think the article not valid to be considered journalism, and valueless as objective criticism. And as nobody else in the media have reported similar criticism, it is likely that these anonymous critics are figments of the writers imagination. Also, on another issue, (i listened as) Commisioner Ray Kelly said publicly on the radio that he would like to thank the shomrim for the help (you can probably find many refs to that) that they have contributed to finding leiby kletzky. This article tries to prove the opposite, and from the story of leiby kletzky itself! Even that which the jewish week quotes has nothing to do with the kletzky story and has to be put in a different section of criticism. --pastasauce 23:26, 24 July 2011 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 1337freek (talkcontribs)
(edit conflict)
  1. I disagree that the London CST belongs - it's nothing to do with their name, but rather with the fact that they don't appear to fit the definition we've given here of a Jewish neighborhood watch organization. CST's work, according to their website, appears to be primarily the collection and publishing of data on antisemitic incidents (as well as some community stuff not directly related to law enforcement); when they patrol, they appear to do so in conjunction with the police, rather than as a separate body. More to the point, I removed the list because in including it, we begin to run into directory issues. The organizations are not independently notable, and listing every city - not even neighborhood - that has shomrim (particularly when we allow it to be defined so loosely) does not increase reader understanding of the topic.
Thank you for joining the conversation. I'm not seeing directory problems with the list. If you could clarify which item in you feel conflicts that would be helpful. As to what the groups need to do in order to be included in this article, I'm not sure. I understand taht there is a different modus operendi among the groups but they seem to be all varients on a common theme - "Volunteers creating a watch group in Jewish communities". So yes, in London they may patrol along with the police, in Brooklyn they patrol on their own, and in Australia they fly to Israel and train with IDF counter-terror units. The concept is the same and as such I feel that they all fall under one umbrella. If there was an official orginazation that included all of the US east-coast groups and had rules and bylaws defining what it means to be a group with the name "Shomrim", then London and South Africa would indeed be out. But as the article is about the concept rather than an organization, I feel that all of these groups are "in". I've got to go but hope to address the other points later. Joe407 (talk) 13:58, 25 July 2011 (UTC)
Saying "There is a Jewish organization in Melbourne and Syndney" basically just tells us "There are Jews in Melbourne and Sydney," which we knew already. If we defined "shomrim" much more strictly - including only groups that called themselves shomrim or that a reliable third-party source had defined as shomrim - or if we wrote about neighborhoods (like we have for Brooklyn) rather than only cities, then that could be useful and encyclopedic. But just listing all organizations that fit extremely loose criteria makes the page a directory of these organizations, rather than providing information about Jewish diaspora culture, etc. (Not to mention that just deciding that these organizations that no source has designated as shomrim are shomrim violates WP:NOR, which I realize that I forgot to mention before.) Roscelese (talk contribs) 17:46, 25 July 2011 (UTC)
I'm shifting this conversation to a new section. the question at hand is "What is the topic of this article?
  1. I agree that the Jewish Week is RS for this. (I've criticized its failure to fact-check in the past - things like mixing up the Cape of Good Hope and Cape Horn that don't necessarily affect the quality of their articles very much but that would be easily corrected with a small amount of effort - but I doubt they just fabricated a quote.)
  2. I disagree that the article does not report anyone criticizing the shomrim on the basis of the secret list of molesters and their other conduct with regard to child sexual abuse. (If you think it is not sufficient, however, we also have this editorial from the same issue which perhaps makes the point more clearly.) A better way of addressing this issue, however, would be to gather sources and write more about the shomrim's history, methods, and relationships with police, without framing it as a criticism section.
--Roscelese (talk contribs) 01:36, 25 July 2011 (UTC)

Who are Shomrim?

Roscelese raised a good question: What is the topic of this article? Is it about a specific orginazation called "Shomrim"? Is it about all groups called "Shomrim"? Is it about Jewish community watch groups to which the Hebrew term "shomrim" can be applied? Personaly, I would go with option #3 because as a concept Jewish community watch groups is widepread enough and have collectively recieved enough media converage that it passes WP:N. None of the individual groups have sufficient individual notability or coverage to pass WP:N and there is no overall orginazation called "Shomrim", just individual groups using the term for its name recognition. What do you this is the topic of this article? Joe407 (talk) 20:12, 25 July 2011 (UTC)

I don't think a group needs to have "shomrim" in its name in order to be part of the topic discussed here (although all of most of the ones that I would say belong here do use the term) - I think it is necessary that some source describe the group as shomrim, either the group themselves or a third-party source, to avoid original research. I think you're right that the individual groups are not notable, but that the type of group is notable. Roscelese (talk contribs) 21:05, 25 July 2011 (UTC)
As I understood it when I came across the stub (sorry, I neglected to check the talk page before undertaking my rewrite and expansion), this article is about the Orthodox Jewish Shomrim organization founded in Brooklyn in the late 1970s / early 1980s which has been expanded to a few other cities. It is a specific model of Orthodox Jewish volunteers patrolling their own neighborhoods, with training and licensing from police, and has adequate sourcing from a wide variety of reliable sources. Regarding other Jewish neighborhood watch organizations such as those in Melbourne and Sydney, I think they should be put in a paragraph under Neighborhood watch (and a link to the main article on Shomrim could also be put there). Yoninah (talk) 15:25, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
Great edits Yoninah! --pastasauce (talk) 15:38, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
Thanks. Yoninah (talk) 15:53, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
I really appreciate all the content you've added. However, it's had the effect of creating a criticism ghetto - where positive information about the shomrim appears in the main text under "operations" and under the individual groups, but negative information appears in a section of its own at the bottom of the article - which is frowned upon. Can we integrate the "Police relations" section better? Roscelese (talk contribs) 16:05, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

To address Yoninah's comment that the article is about the "Shomrim organization founded in Brooklyn in the late 1970s / early 1980s which has been expanded to a few other cities." - this would be true if the other cities are in fact branches / expansions of the Brooklyn-founded org. Is this the case? If so, this should be in the article. If it is not the case than the article should either be about a specific orginazation or about the concept. Thoughts? Joe407 (talk) 17:08, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

It is my understanding that the Shomrim groups in different cities are not branches but independent spin-offs of the same concept. To my knowledge, the Brooklyn, Monsey and London Shomrim are all run by Hasidim, which is not the case for general Jewish neighborhood watch groups. I will try to fine-tune the article a bit more with yours and Roscelese's observations. Yoninah (talk) 18:41, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
If they are all independant then we should define the article's subject as Volunteer Jewish community watch groups. Joe407 (talk) 19:17, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
They appear to be independent, but to avoid OR and indiscriminateness, we should define it as volunteer Jewish community watch groups that call themselves shomrim or are called shomrim by reliable sources. Roscelese (talk contribs) 20:20, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
Joe: Do you mean that you'd rename the page Jewish volunteer community watch groups, and make Shomrim a subsection? Wouldn't that pare down a lot of information about the Shomrim groups into a paragraph or two? The Shomrim patrols in Brooklyn, Monsey, Baltimore and London really do have a lot more in common with each other than with general Jewish neighborhood watch groups. Yoninah (talk) 21:21, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

patch --i goofed

oops. thanks user Roscelese for catching my NYPD Shormrim patch addition GOOF and explaining it --in the edit summary code at lest. good that the article's got a caretaker these days. Cramyourspam (talk) 22:24, 26 July 2011 (UTC)

I don't get it. That patch looked like the Brooklyn South Shomrim, not the NYPD. Yoninah (talk) 22:31, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
It was a NYPD patch, though (I had the same thought as you, so I ran a search on "NYPD patch" - they all look like that, it's just the text that's different). My guess is that the unit to which the owner of the patch belongs happens to patrol in South Brooklyn. But I could be wrong - do the non-police shomrim wear NYPD patches at all? Roscelese (talk contribs) 22:35, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
This is the Brooklyn South Shomrim Patrol patch! This is real, even if it looks like the NYPD one. Check out the general facebook page for the shomrim over here for much more patches. Theres probably even more info over there to add, but I dont use facebook! I will revert to the cramyourspam edit soon. --pastasauce (talk) 03:25, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
Aha, you're right! I guess that means it doesn't belong on the other shomrim page. And that we may have to work on the "police relations" content... Roscelese (talk contribs) 03:48, 27 July 2011 (UTC)

Lead

According to WP:LEAD, the lead should basically be a summary of the article. This means that due to the amount of criticism of the shomrim we have in the article, a sentence or two about it should appear in the lead. How best can we summarize that section? Roscelese (talk contribs) 20:58, 27 July 2011 (UTC)

Maybe -after -They also help locate missing people. In the United States, Shomrim groups are licensed and trained by local police departments and sometimes serve as a liaison between the religious public and police. - we can add- "While they have been publicly praised for their efforts, the shomrim have been criticized by the police for not completely cooperating with them." --pastasauce (talk) 21:06, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
I don't think that's really suitable. Mostly because it waves the criticism away by making it part of another sentence about how great the shomrim are, but we could also give more detail. Roscelese (talk contribs) 22:33, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
Tell me again why we have to be so critical? They have gotten awards and praise and they have gotten criticized. So let's please make the LEAD be a summary of that. --pastasauce (talk) 00:30, 28 July 2011 (UTC)
The lead as it stood was already positive - "Shomrim help with X, Y, and Z" - and giving a vague wave to the criticism while piling on more positive statements is not neutral and does not reflect the balance of the sources. Roscelese (talk contribs) 03:10, 28 July 2011 (UTC)
I gave it a try. Yoninah (talk) 23:57, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
Looks all right to me. Roscelese (talk contribs) 03:10, 28 July 2011 (UTC)
At the moment, the lead is full of criticism, and doesn't really reflect the reality of Shomrim. Maybe a bit of praise needs to be put in prior to the critic? -- VarifiedEditor (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 19:57, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
Feel free to suggest something! –Roscelese (talk contribs) 20:05, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
How about adding this at the end (before the "History" tab): "Despite these isolated incidents of criticism, Shomrim are generally praised, plus on many occasions received awards from the Police and the community, for their regular lawful contribution in protecting the local neighborhood and helping in the fight against crime". Any good? -- VarifiedEditor (talk) 20:23, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
I think any phrasing which attempts to undermine the existing text is a poor choice. Similarly, we wouldn't write "Despite isolated praise in specific regions, multiple separate Shomrim groups have been found to use excessive force against non-Jewish suspects and to protect child molesters." Also, I very much do not see that the praise is as general as you claim.
As well, I think the idea of praise/criticism format is not particularly apt. It's currently phrased in the lead as "shomrim have been criticized for one or two things," but the real information there is "shomrim do those things" (not notifying police, whatever) and it could be rephrased. Whereas the fact that shomrim fight crime is already present in the lede and does not need re-stating. –Roscelese (talk contribs) 20:39, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
How about just adding the fact that Shomrim have on many occasions received awards and commendations from the Police for their work. Any better?? -- VarifiedEditor (talk) 20:52, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
Any views? -- VarifiedEditor (talk) 07:46, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Police Relations edit

I would like to edit the 2nd paragraph of Police relations but I dont know how to properly implement it, and i dont wanna be too WP:BOLD. Here goes- In an interview with Ami Magazine, Simcha Bernath the Shomrim coordinater, has denied that which the WSJ (and subsequently the Jewish week) quoted the shomrim as saying. He mantains that the shomrim do not keep a secret list of child molesters which they hold back from the police. The ami magazine doesn't have a free web version of their paper, but one blog took scans of the interview over here. Please discuss. Note:there might be other interesting tidbits in there worthy of adding to this article. --pastasauce (talk) 01:47, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

It seems to be a good source, but we would have to keep these things in mind:
  1. We can't remove the statement that someone in the Brooklyn South Shomrim said that they keep a list on file. We can only add that someone else denied it.
  2. Maybe it's just me, but I don't see where in the interview Bernath says this. It's set off at the top of the page as though it's a quote excerpted from the interview, but unless I've overlooked it, it doesn't appear in the interview text. Do you know what's going on there?
--Roscelese (talk contribs) 02:15, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
  1. Going over the references, I noticed that the reference to the WSJ doesn't belong there and it should be the daily news instead. Also i noticed that the Daily news doesn't say that it was a list of local child molesters, rather just a list of suspected child molesters, which given that the shomrim have no solid evidence, it seems to be their choice to report it to cops (im not really sure the cops would even accept it without proof). On another hand, bernath seems to deny that theres even a suspected list, rather he says that they misunderstood (or misquoted) daskal, and that the shomrim cull their list from the NY offender database. I'm not sure where this all leads.
  2. There's a couple of pictures there, its the last picture, and its on the top right side. --pastasauce (talk) 03:47, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
  1. Bernath isn't a reliable source for the statement that the Jewish Week misquoted Daskal. We'd need some sort of retraction or statement from Daskal. We can say that Bernath denied it and suggested it was a misquote, but that's all. The stuff about suspected molesters (and the article does currently say "suspected" in both places) is cited to the Jewish Week as well as the WSJ, so the WSJ ref is probably a stray. I'll take it out.
  2. Aha, thanks, not sure how I missed that. Roscelese (talk contribs) 03:57, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

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